Wow!! The ending was just PERFECT!! I really liked this sad yet eye-opener poem of yours. Now let me start with what i liked about your piece of work:
1. You started the poem with your title. A very nice way of engaging the readers.
2. 'The gigantic waves swallowed,
Swallowed their loved ones'
You used 'swallow' twice, one after the other, a perfect enhancer!!
3. 'No-thing' was fabulous.
4. I liked the way you pointed the Tsunami as 'disastrous'. It showed how much agony you have.
5. As i had already said your ending was superb because you added the part that you were writing a poem for the people who suffered, which was sarcastic and also sad.
Things which i didn't like and need a mention:
1. I think it would have been better if you would have divided your poem into stanzas. It becomes easier to read that way.
2. In the seventh line, instead if 'humankind', it should have been 'mankind'.
3. I did not quite understand why you mentioned the Indians killing ganga river. It could have been explained further.
But overall your poem was a delight!
Keep writing, best of luck!!!
Cheers,
Shiksha!!
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