Knight Dragon here to give one of the requested reviews from the Knights of the Green Room.
As a major fan of mythology, I liked how you took the Pandora concept and reversed it to where this Pandora is too scared to open the box. Also, instead of the box being readily available like it was for the ancient Pandora, this box is hidden and has to be sought out. And it's also interesting that you have this Pandora wanting treasure, seeking it out, yet being too timid to open her treasure once she finds it.
The biggest thing I liked about this poem was that it felt like the tempo was just right. Not too showy, not off kilter, just there, breathing and being what it is supposed to be. The only line I'd recommend you investigate for possible revision would be "Search for things I know". That "search" just stuck out a little, since I was expecting "searching". But it's entirely up to you.
Points: 11170
Reviews: 508
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