Hello jordin is here with a review for you and my team.
I hope this helps you out.
First thing first this is very small you should make it a bit smaller but it okay if you ignore me that would be fine.
Second you could re write it like this.
The twinkle in your eyes shine so bright.
And the smile on your face so right.
Your voice so sweet.
And the feel of you beneth me.
At the feel of your touch,
My body is sent into a frenzy.
Well your rimes are... well good nice job with them.
And you miss spelled Beneath.
Keep writing and good luck.
~Jon~
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