Does this poem have a double meaning? Because two messages are palpable to me here . One is that melanie coli is a metaphor for melancholie. I feel lucky about this one. The second is that melanie coli is a love interest, possibly the cause of your ahnedonia, although ite possible you wouldnt remember a highschool event. It seems to be about existential despair. But what do I really know about you. The poem is simple and effecrive, the paragraphs connected by the use of the frases incorporating the idea of the soothing lullaby and not wanting to exist. This allows for a proper flow. I would suggest that you change "put me asleep" to "put me to sleep" or something of the like, as this is the one grammatical fallcy that I could find. Good writing.
Points: 361
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