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Hello CapitalMonday here for a review. i will start of saying this poem shows what life is really about and how you might find people with the same problems as you. I also enjoyed how you made the jungle symbolize the challenges that you will see in your lifetime.

Nitpicks:

At the somewhat end of this poem, there is a boy who comes in and I was like okay so they are going to talk to each other but at the end he just looks at her and wonder who is she? I was hoping for a love poem with them meeting and trying to get out of this jungle together.

The one who never fit in Maybe putting a misfit or a sore thumb (I think)

like saving scissors This part is a little confusing since how can scissors save some one? I mean, i get it in a sense but other side of me says it is still confusing.

All and all, i think this poem tells an amazing tale and gives a great message that life is not just one battle, its everyone's else battle too.

Farewell,
CapitalMonday

THIS IS BEAUTIFUL!!! There. I said it.

Hi, J.C. here for a review!

She is trying to find her way through the tangled jungle of life.

Pulling through the gnarled ways of life

She sits down and watches the vines twist again, even after being cut

They somehow come back to life to trap her once more

She does not ask for much

Just a simple island in the ocean of the world

They decided to give her a forest instead

Vines, leaves, heat, and scare

He looks at the deep blue eyes that could pass for sparkling oceans

But he only sees a swampy green with a scared, worried frown

Who is she?

Hey, yo, Thewriter13! Strange here on this fantastic Review Day and I have a review for you, sorry if it's short. I told you I was going to review this, so I am going to review. I don't see how you wrote this under a minute, because this poem is good.
I do like the idea of this poem. This girl get captured by all the burdens in her life (hence the imagery and meets this boy who wants to know about her. That does cause a problem I will delve into later, I do have to admit one thing. This imagery is blissful and great. It helps the poem push above and beyond. You do have a knack for plopping a scene into my mind. Heck, you even got some emotions in there. It's great!
The idea, is slightly overused. I usually see this idea in poems, stories, whatever literary work is out there. Even though this poem is highly original for the use of imagery and subtle emotions, it's still the idea. I'm sorry, but that's how I feel about it. I have to cut this review short because my mind is about to explode.
Overall, good job.
Strange gives you...
8.6/10
Good job,
Keep writing,
Stay groovy, my friend.

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Hey Simon & Garfunkel buddy

This is really good! It's hard to find poems on this site that are nice and long like this one is, so that's cool!

All twisted into one, giant mess

A sound comes from the east, cutting her thoughts like saving scissors

When will I be free?

She wonders in that moment

Who am I? What is me?

This is an amazing poem!! The language you used is just... words can not describe how beautiful it is I'm no poet, but I can see a good poem when it stares me in the face! It was written with so much feeling and emotion, I'm not sure whether it's because you feel like this, or you have a friend that does, or you're just simply amazing, but your interpretation of what a social outcast would feel like is crazy good! There was just one line: "vines, leaves, heat and scare," I wasn't so sure about. I know you probably had to use the word scare to make it the right length or something, but it dunno, to me it sounded a bit off. THAT'S JUST MY OPINION THOUGH! Anyway, overall this was a really great poem