Hey there! Hadj battling here for review day victory
Ouch. This was violent, creepy, and really amazing
It was interesting and unexpected to have an angel attacking the speaker, and so it really made me think.
I would suggest leaving out one of the mentions of the heart
"Red covering its hands with my heart" or "Cutting through my heart", because when I got to the second one I thought, wait, did I already read about their heart being cut?
Other than that this is practically flawless. Great work, and keep writing!
~Hadj
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