Hey rhisofia! Alex here to review your poem!
I really enjoyed reading this! I loved the word choice to describe the events in this poem in a fresh and new way. My favourite bits were:
a beauty gone and tarnished dark,
Very nice! And:
Winter, buds appear and multiply
I love how you describe frost as buds!
Just a few things that could be improved:
You need capitals at the start of every line and a period, comma or other punctuation at the end of every line. It's one of those poetry rules that we must obey
who loved the sun so much it forgot to fear of cold
Shouldn't that bit be "fear THE cold"?
Overall, lovely poem! Very nice imagery!
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