Hey rhisofia! Alex here to review your poem!
I really enjoyed reading this! I loved the word choice to describe the events in this poem in a fresh and new way. My favourite bits were:
a beauty gone and tarnished dark,
Very nice! And:
Winter, buds appear and multiply
I love how you describe frost as buds!
Just a few things that could be improved:
You need capitals at the start of every line and a period, comma or other punctuation at the end of every line. It's one of those poetry rules that we must obey
![Razz :P](./images/smilies/icon_razz.gif)
who loved the sun so much it forgot to fear of cold
Shouldn't that bit be "fear THE cold"?
Overall, lovely poem! Very nice imagery!
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