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Why does this hook suck so bad



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Wed Feb 14, 2018 9:56 pm
sabri4027 says...



Hi!

So I am writing an essay for my English class and I having the worst time figuring out how to make the following sentence more descriptive, visual, and just overall better. If you have a second and any ideas I seriously would be so grateful.

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Thu Feb 15, 2018 6:56 am
Lightsong says...



Um... can you show us the said sentence so that we can help you with it? ^^'
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

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Kazumi says...



What kind of essay are you writing? What are the restrictions imposed upon you? We gotta know that so we can tailor our answers to your specific needs.
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You walk into this room at your own risk, because it leads to the future, not a future that will be but one that might be. This is not a new world, it is simply an extension of what began in the old one. It has patterned itself after every dictator who has ever planted the ripping imprint of a boot on the pages of history since the beginning of time. It has refinements, technological advances, and a more sophisticated approach to the destruction of human freedom. But like every one of the super states that preceded it, it has one iron rule: logic is an enemy and truth is a menace.
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