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Wed Jan 27, 2010 12:18 am
*coco says...



Hey amy, it's me again :D I really appreciated your review. I was quite nervous to write my next chapter because I realised I hadn't really put some drama in like you and a lot of my other reviewers mentioned, and I kinda felt quite pressurised to put some drama in. Anyway, It's been difficult but I've finally put up chapter 9, so I hope you can take a look at it when you can and give me your opinion on whether it's enough, if it's not I may stop writing as it's difficult to keep readers interested in a long story. Anyway, thanks so much x

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post651464.html (chapter 9

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Wed Jan 27, 2010 4:50 am
Elinor says...



Hi Amy!

Could you review this piece? ^_^
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Sat Jan 30, 2010 6:08 am
PenNPaper says...



Hi Amy, wondering if you could review this for me, it's called The Elemental Guardians and it's under Fantasy Fiction.
Here's the link
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Sun Jan 31, 2010 4:34 pm
AquaMarine says...



Done! :D
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Sun Jan 31, 2010 10:05 pm
mollytate says...



Hey there are actually a few things that you could review...take your pick:

1) Triston's proposal-A girl's gaurdian angel proposes to her (Warning: It's in the middle of a chapter in the middle of the book but it's gotten the best reviews out my posts)
Under romantic fiction and labeled as Triston's proposal

2) The Truth about roses and violets-it's not corny, I promise.
Under Dramatic poetry and labeled The Truth about Roses and Violets

3)Molly's home-Also a segment of my novel that just talks about my characters living environment.
Under Romantic Fiction and labeled Molly's home.

You don't have to look at all of them I just wanted to give you options. And also, take your time :smt001

Thanks
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Mon Feb 01, 2010 11:22 pm
pudin.junidf says...



Hey Amy!

Could you please review this for me?
It's Lyric Poetry and it's called Little Missy

Thanks so much
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 10:23 pm
KanenRenoir says...



Hey, could you do me a favor and critique this. It's my fantasy novel(the first chapter). If you will, thanks.

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Wed Feb 17, 2010 10:00 pm
AquaMarine says...



*bumps* :D Go ahead, I need to critique.
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Wed Feb 17, 2010 10:44 pm
Rosendorn says...



Amy! Would you be so kind as to review this? It's a poem in Other Fiction.

Thanks! :D
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Thu Feb 18, 2010 8:35 pm
LookUpThere says...



Amy! You're really popular. Sorry to add to the baggage but:

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Could you review that? Thanks.





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Sat Feb 20, 2010 8:29 am
AquaMarine says...



Done both! :D
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Sat Feb 20, 2010 6:41 pm
Lena.Wooldridge says...



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Thank you.
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Sun Feb 21, 2010 6:03 pm
bubblegum says...



I don't know if you review scripts, but I'll be very glad if you take a look at it.
I'm still kind of new when it comes to writing scripts. : )

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Sun Feb 21, 2010 9:47 pm
Kaedee says...



Hi! If you get the chance, can you review this? http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post656509.html#p656509 It's Chapter One of one of my stories, Astianna. (Fantasy Fiction) It would much appreciated! Thanks-

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Tue Feb 23, 2010 5:31 pm
AquaMarine says...



All done!
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