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Mon Nov 30, 2009 4:52 am
Rascalover says...



Romantic fiction: Let Me Love You

this is chapter 12

Brief description of what has happened before: Isabella was in a car accident a few days later her boyfriend whose in a band breaks up with her. Jay, the boyfriend, has a cousin named Gary and that how Isabella met Jay. He is also in the band. He consoles Isabella cause theyre best friends and they slowly fall in love. He treats her to a weekend get away and gives her a promise ring to always love her. But now shes pregnant and she doesnt know what to do. whether to tell him or not.

link: topic54963.html

Please review thanks,
Tiffany
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Tue Dec 08, 2009 6:18 pm
*coco says...



Hey, Amy! Remember me? :D I don't know if you've had the chance to look at the new chapters from my story Of Loss and Love, but I hope you could review them for me when your not busy. I'm not sure what chapter you last read but here's the link for the first chapter, it has the links to all the others on it. Anyway, I'm really excited to see what you think of the development of the story and thanks again.
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Tue Dec 08, 2009 9:10 pm
AquaMarine says...



Tiffany's is done! Sorry it's so late; I didn't see it! Coco, of course I remember you. :D I looked on the story, and apparently I've only review chapter one and two, although I seem to remember more! But I'll get around to the rest as soon as I have time.

Thanks!

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Thu Dec 10, 2009 12:19 am
anima9 says...



Oh please! I need your time and patience. Please review my chapter 2!

A Little Fantasy Chapter 2: Never Forgotten
topic55391.html

I will be grateful to your generous and kind efforts.
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Thu Dec 10, 2009 5:30 am
Shearwater says...



Hey Aquamarine, it's Pink.
Do you mind reviewing the second chapter of Thorns & Roses?
topic55363.html
Thanks a bunch, color buddy. (haha)

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Thu Dec 10, 2009 6:37 am
AquaMarine says...



No problem guys!
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Fri Dec 11, 2009 6:23 pm
AquaMarine says...



Ok, all of Coco's are done! Now I'll do Anima's and my colour buddie's!
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Thu Dec 17, 2009 1:29 am
pudin.junidf says...



Hey Amy!

JUst wondering if you could review this for me, is Pudin's Image Shack

Thanks so much for the help.
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Thu Dec 17, 2009 6:40 pm
AquaMarine says...



No problem! I'll just do it now. :D
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Thu Dec 17, 2009 8:56 pm
AquaMarine says...



Ok, all reviews done! :D
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Sat Dec 19, 2009 6:00 am
lilymoore says...



The Test
It's a very short lyric poem. But I could really use a solid critique on it. It's very short.
Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.





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Sat Dec 19, 2009 7:54 pm
AquaMarine says...



Sure, Lily! I'll give it a go. It'll be either right now, or tomorrow. :D
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Sun Dec 20, 2009 5:38 pm
peanut19 says...



Hi Amy! Can you review my story Snow Blurred Memories? It's other fiction. Here's the link: topic55747.html Thank you! :)

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Wed Dec 23, 2009 8:56 pm
Shearwater says...



Hey Aqua, it's me again! =]
topic55963.html
can you review the fourth chapter?
(p.s. congrats on becoming a purp! :))
Thanks again!

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Wed Dec 23, 2009 8:58 pm
AquaMarine says...



Thank you! And I will have to critique it after Christmas, I'm so sorry about that! (This goes for anyone who asks before the 28th) I'm away, so I can't do it then. But it will be done as soon as I get back!

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