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Thu Dec 04, 2008 8:58 pm
miyaviloves says...



WELCOME

Hello come in take off your shoes and get comfy. I'm an instructor now so I want to give some really good reviews, so instead of mindlessly wandering around and missing out on some pieces that just need that extra special critique I decided to make this thread so you can request a review from me :)

Thing's I am good at looking at:

- Structure
- Emotions in the piece
- Character development
- Dialogue

Yes and No's:

- Anything in fiction really, apart from Fan-fiction.
- Not so hot on anything technical in poetry.
- Art is a yes yes yes.

Please remember that if it is a long piece it might take me a while to post the critique, but for every request I will respond!

If your piece already has over ten in depth reviews then there is not much point in me reviewing it also as most of what I would like to point out has already been done already, however if you have changed it after past critiques then yes I shall be more than happy to skip over and read it!

Ask away!

Meevs
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Fri Dec 05, 2008 11:02 pm
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Name: Mailboxes
Link: post460767.html#460767
Summary: A letter sent from one old summer camp budy to the next
Word Count: 361...ish

If you could review this, that would be fantastic! I would really like some more pointers on this especially, since it's my only piece so far that is an actual 'story'.

Thanks!!


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changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

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Sat Dec 06, 2008 11:08 am
miyaviloves says...



Done :)
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Sat Dec 06, 2008 8:44 pm
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Name: Already Won Me - Revised
Link: post462965.html#462965
Summary: Basic teenage romance that developed quite abruptly. Just sort of tries, anyway, to show the way an unconventional romance blossoms.
Words: 1103
Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.





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Mon Dec 08, 2008 10:29 am
miyaviloves says...



Done :)
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Mon Dec 15, 2008 11:51 pm
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post468281.html#468281
-please? Thank you ^^
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Tue Dec 16, 2008 12:11 am
Antigone Cadmus says...



topic40098.html
Genre: Fantasy
Summary: Crappy werewolf story that needs to be heavily changed

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Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:05 am
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topic31457.html
genre: romantic romance
about: a vampire love story.
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Thu Dec 25, 2008 11:11 pm
miyaviloves says...



Heya guys will get tp these asap! Just been revising like crazyt for my jan exams which are all finished by the 12th so will get to them - just didnt want anyone to think I had forgotton.

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Wed Dec 31, 2008 2:32 am
LoveableLittleSock says...



Hey Miya! Hopefully you won't be bothered with my request, seeing how you're already quite busy. It's pretty short, so you might be able to get through it quickly:

topic41045.html

Thanks a bunch!
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Mon Jan 05, 2009 10:07 am
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Done Nutty's! Will getthose others done asap.

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Tue Jan 06, 2009 11:49 pm
Maki-Chan says...



well I really need my third chapter to be reviewed. Its not really important to know what "Silent Hill" is, even though its a fanfiction. All you need to know is that "Silent Hill" is a town that people's worst fears take shape.

topic40923.html

If you need to know what is happening Beth is looking for her missing sister. Right now she is currently in Silent Hill, with Sera. Sera is a really nice person who wants to help Beth, however Beth hates Sera.

prologue- Beth has a dream that her sister disappears, and it comes true

ch1- 4 years later Beth (18 years old) thinks about the past, and how no one really looked for her sister (Alex). Sera makes her appearance. Its highschool graduation day, and Beth leaves her hometown (Ashfield) and heads to Silent hill to find her sister. (Since she got a note in Alex's handwriting saying "Silent Hill").

ch2- Beth's car brakes down, and she has a strange dream. After she wakes up, Beth hitchhikes, and surprisingly Sera appears and offers her a ride. When they are driving Beth falls asleep, and has a nightmare.

ch3- topic40923.html

please review it *Begs*
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Wed Jan 07, 2009 10:52 am
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Hey Maki, as a general rule for any one else who would like a review Im not so fond of fan fiction, but as It's Silent Hill you have pursuaded me ;)

Again guys, sorry about the slow reviews, gradually getting there! Exams all over by the 21st so please don't think that I have forgotton you!

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Thu Mar 26, 2009 8:53 am
miyaviloves says...



OK! I have done Loveable's and Maki's pieces, but the other two had sooo many critiques already seeing as I have not been on here in AGES (I'm soooo sorry *grovels for forgiveness* :oops: ) can you let me know if you would still like a critique with a PM please?


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Mon Apr 27, 2009 5:42 am
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Hi! Could you please review?

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The tree of terror. [/url]It's part of a story I'm writing, but I have a brief overview at the begining of the piece. it's in action/advent Fiction, and it's about 3 1/2 pages in MS word... sorry! You can take a few days though... I don't really mind!
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