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Mon Dec 01, 2008 11:37 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



Disclaimer:
The establishment is not responsible for any injury, blood loss, or health detrimentation that these reviews may induce.


It would make Queen Sarah delighted if you requested a review from the castle, so please do so. Being royal, our critiques are the creme de la creme, detailed and helpful, with quality as well as excessive quantity.

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> NO multiple chapter requests, but feel free to ask for a crit a second time.
> Peeps who've critted my stuff will be favoured.
> Don't stalk me for critiques if I'm a bit late. You'll be ignored and your request deleted.

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Warning: If you cannot take this kind of collossal slaughtering, then I suggest you go elsewhere.
[Link to an example of a critique of mine. It's at the bottom of the page.]

Golden Rules:

Tell me the title, link, and genre of your piece.

Example:

Title: Story Of Wonder And Doom
Link: http://youngwriterssociety.com/storyofwonderanddoom
Genre: Fantasy


Genres:

Sarah Would Smile Upon:

-Historical
-Romantic
-Other
-Poetry
-Non-Fiction
-Fantasy

Sarah Would Frown Upon:

-Fan-fiction
-Sci-Fi
-Adventure/Action.

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I will give details on spelling mistakes, grammatical mistakes, your strengths, your weaknesses, characters, storyline, description, overall and your writing style. If you want specific help/comments on an area of your piece, just tell me what that is in your request.

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Completed:

The Promise by springrain
Snowflakes by mizziceberg
A Titleless Story by lucyy
[url=http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30187.html[/url]Carson Lanye's Story[/url] by CK Lynn
The Mansion - 1 by Lord Anzius
The Mansion - 2 by Lord Anzius
Predicament by kissthewitch
Eternal Sunshine by AngelOfDeath
Tamia's Quest by Nutty
The Zipper Of Your Pants by Nutty
So Goes the Museum by Galerius
Famous Last Words by dreamintechnicolour
Alone by springrain2693
Chapter One [Untitled] by Haruno Sakura
Pretty People by antipop
Red,Blue,Purple by TeddyBear22
Short Horror Story by Lucyy.
Ch 1-Scavenger by TL-G Wooster
Sister by Ducati
Watching Mermaids by sofi
Angel's Symphony -5 by angels-symphony
Walking in the Dark by LoveableLittleSock
Jimmy by Ducati
Bubbling Chapter 10 by Demeter
Chapter 4 by Blink
Short Story by lost_in_dreamland
Them by lakegirls
Scavenger - 1.1 by TL G-Wooster
The Forest by Anna09

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In Queue:
None

On with the [s]slaughtering[/s] reviewing.
Last edited by CastlesInTheSky on Mon Jan 12, 2009 5:27 pm, edited 47 times in total.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.





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Mon Dec 01, 2008 11:45 pm
Juniper says...



Yay! *claps* this thread should have been made a long time ago.

May the royal reviewer review my failure at NaNo; The promise [part one]?
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Mon Dec 01, 2008 11:53 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



Done!
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.





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Tue Dec 02, 2008 11:48 am
mizz-iceberg says...



Hello Sarah! Can you please review this for me:

topic38876.html


Thank you!
I'm a godmother, that's a great thing to be, a godmother. She calls me god for short, that's cute, I taught her that.
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Tue Dec 02, 2008 4:34 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



Done!
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.





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Tue Dec 02, 2008 5:43 pm
lucyy says...



Heyy there Sarah, could you please review (any chapter you wish to choose) of A Titleless Story - huge thank you in advance (:. Oh yeah, and it's romantic fiction - just thought I should say - anywhooo =D thank you!!

--Lucyy xx
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Tue Dec 02, 2008 9:03 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



Working on it at the moment, Lucy dear.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.





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Tue Dec 02, 2008 10:25 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



Done!
Any more?
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.





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Tue Dec 02, 2008 11:07 pm
CK Lynn says...



It would be great if you could review this:

topic30187.html

It's the beginning of a novel (kinda romance, kinda saga-ish) I'm half done with, and I just can't get it to sound right. Feel free to flame it or rip it to teeny shreds.
"Just saying none of us want to conquer the world won't stop some other idiot from trying."
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Tue Dec 02, 2008 11:17 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



CK Lynn, I'm on the case. :wink:
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.





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Wed Dec 03, 2008 5:20 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



Okay CK Lynn, it's done!
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.





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Wed Dec 03, 2008 9:01 pm
Lord Anzius says...



Please review these:



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34323.html The mansion chapter 1

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35415.html The mansion chapter 2

other fiction.

I must make them perfect. They are my babies. :)

Could you be so kind and review them for me?
To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
-Giuseppe Verdi-





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Wed Dec 03, 2008 9:09 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



I'll get to it, Lord Anzius. There may however be a delay on the second chapter, as I've had an overflow of homework recently. You know the drill.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.





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Wed Dec 03, 2008 11:24 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



Chapter 1 done, Lord Anzius.
Will get to Chapter 2 when I have finished my homework. :wink:

Any more?
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.





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Thu Dec 04, 2008 7:11 pm
CastlesInTheSky says...



Keep 'em coming. :wink:
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.








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