Young Writers Society

I'm running out of things to just skim through and review on the forums, so I'm putting myself up here.

I'll let you know what you can expect from me. First off, I don't really check for grammar, punctuation, spelling, or any other mechanics. I may, but don't count on it. What I will look for if you ask me to review are things like character development, the overall cohesiveness of a story, and description. If you want me to look for specific things, such as one character's believeablity or something like that, tell me and I will be very happy to do it.

I will review just about anything in the Science Fiction, Other Fiction (especially Other Fiction), Fantasy, or Action/Adventure genres. There are a few stipulations. I don't do multi-parters really well, even though I've written a few of them myself. If no one's giving me anything to review, then I'm more likely to do it. If there's a lot of stuff, one parters will take precedence over multi-parters. And, to you Fantasy people, if I think that what you are writting is a Tolkein ripoff, I will let you know. However, I will give you advice on how to improve it, not simply stand there and insult you like a high school jock. I'm not here to make you feel bad, I'm here to help you improve your story.

You can post your links on this thread or, if you don't really feel like doing that for whatever reason, PM me. As of right now, I can promise reviews in 1-2 days. This may change at some point in the future though, in which case I will inform you when you ask me to review your work.

That's all on my end. Send your stuff in, and good luck.

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Edit: As of August 22nd, 2008, I am going to say that though I haven't put a price on my critiques, if you would critique something of mine, I will be more receptive to you if you need me to critique more of your work.

Could you review my story "The List"? I'm warning you now, it's quite long, but it's only one part. It's in my portfolio. I'll give you cookies and review something of yours too

Could you review this for me? topic33149.html If so, thanks a lot!

Stella, Firearris, I've reviewed yours.

Next?

Hey, I just posted this, it's the first chapter of a supernatural horror story. It's sort of long, but not too bad. I'm worried about my dialog, description, and character development.

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P.S. I give points to good reviewers. \

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Above is chapter one to my novel, Eleven Days in Hell. I have six chapters up right now, and i'm working on chapter eight. The more reviews I can get for some of the later chapters (if you want, you can review all of them, but my last couple of chapters don't have many, if any, reviews), the more I can feel like I can write and have it be read. I post Chapter One only to allow you to understand what's going on with the characters.

Jamie_rocks, Flemzo, you're covered now. Who's next?

I'm next! ^^

Into The Dark


In general look for character development and mood? I wanted it to be effect for emotions, but I'm not sure how it was. Thaaaaank you. ^^

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please and thank you

I do like gold stars!

---Jon---

Out of Focus

You know you love me. XXD

So be harsh? Please? XXD

~JFW1415

Suzanne, wiseman, J, finished all of yours, no problems.

Any other unfortunate souls?

Yes, please...

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It's the second chapter of a multi-part story. In Other Fiction, because it's very light on the sci-fi aspect.

Thank you very much!

took care of fourthelement

I desperately need reviews for my novels Chapter's: Ellima and the Cerulean Crystal!
If you could review it I'd be ever so grateful !

Let me know when you want your payment of one big cookie ! XD

Got one of yours, Swottielottie.