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Sun Apr 26, 2009 11:20 pm
Rosendorn says...



I hate to see a good critic's thread die.

topic47262.html

Title- Under the Earth's surface
Genre- Fantasy
Word count- Under 800
Summery- One of my darker works (no need to worry about overly-cute stuff here! :P). It's told from the perspective of a dark elf during an earthquake, and why earthquakes are caused. (It's got magical roots, of course. ;))

Shred it!
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Mon Apr 27, 2009 12:49 am
Bickazer says...



Title: So far, "The Wingless Girl"
Genre: Fantasy
Brief Summary: Set in a parallel universe where people have wings. A girl without wings is discovered, as possible proof that travel between universes is possible. First chapter in what will hopefully be an epic novel, or whatever.
Link: topic47117.html

Please? It's been very bereft of the sort of in-depth critiques that I swallow like manna. Many thanks in advance!
Ah, it is an empty movement. That is an empty movement. It is.





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Mon Apr 27, 2009 5:40 am
asxz says...



Hi! Could you please review?

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The tree of terror. [/url]It's part of a story I'm writing, but I have a brief overview at the begining of the piece. it's in action/advent Fiction, and it's about 3 1/2 pages in MS word... sorry! You can take a few days though... I don't really mind!
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Sun May 03, 2009 7:49 pm
Antigone Cadmus says...



Voila! Done!
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85





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Wed May 06, 2009 6:05 pm
mizz-iceberg says...



Hello!

Title- Some Mettle for His Virility
Link- topic47744.html
Genre- Romantic Fiction
Word count- Under 1,350
Summary- A short story written for Cal' contest. About a boy travelling the deadly Erobus desert.


Thanks so much!
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Sun May 10, 2009 5:45 pm
Antigone Cadmus says...



Done!

Next?
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85





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Mon May 11, 2009 11:40 pm
doodle:] says...



Tittle: The Last Gift
Genre: Fantasy-ish
Summary: A mute girls finds a maagicall journal, to put it one sentance. xD
Link: post555572.html#555572

Thanks in advance!





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Sat May 30, 2009 4:06 am
Mira says...



Hiyas! I was wondering if you could review this... Let me just tell you the info and then I'll be on my way. :)

Title: The Greatest Battle in the History of YWS
Genre: Fan Fiction
Summary: Let's just say it involves a bunch of angry giraffes and me running for my life. My inspiration came from my first day and the responses I got to my blog. :)

topic48602.html

Thanks a bunches!

Smiles!
@;~ Saph
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Sun Jun 07, 2009 11:52 am
Antigone Cadmus says...



Re-opened for business! School's out in a few days, and I have a lot more time. Bring 'em on!
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
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Tue Jun 09, 2009 5:36 am
asxz says...



Hi, I think I've asked you for a review before... it might have been the prologue for this book, way back in febuary. I would like you to review my story. It's chapter four in a book that I am writing, but at the begining of the first part there is a quick brief over what has happened so far. I really want a harsh critique, so rip it to shreads; PLEASE!

Link: Part ONE:
Part TWO:
Thank you so much!
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Tue Jul 07, 2009 5:23 pm
Antigone Cadmus says...



Back open for business!

Bring 'em in!
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
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Sun Jul 12, 2009 8:19 pm
DakotaK says...



Hey Antigone!
I was hoping you could check out my "Which Path to Take?" contest entry. It's Fantasy Fiction, PG and called Wyndolyn. It's about a elven girl running away from her Father, the King. I wanted to get some reviews on it to spiff it up some before the contest (on the 15th). I hope you don't die of boredom reading it LOL.
~Dakota

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Looking for peeps to review my novel:)

novel.php?id=1142





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Mon Jul 13, 2009 11:47 am
Jetpack says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic50640.html

This is a contest entry. It's in Other Fiction, called 'Green with Envy' for the moment, and is kind of hard to explain without killing it completely. Though it's not the same contest as Dakota, it has the same deadline, and I'm really looking for a harsh review. Please and thank you. :D





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Mon Jul 13, 2009 11:54 pm
DakotaK says...



Hey Antigone,
I know by now you're probably sick of reading my story:) I was wondering if you could review it for me one last time and let me know if it's improved slightly, been made worse, or just been mucked around in.

topic50754.html

~Dakota
What is important is to know fear and yet take a step forward.
Rosette Christopher

Looking for peeps to review my novel:)

novel.php?id=1142





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Tue Jul 14, 2009 7:19 pm
Antigone Cadmus says...



Done. Keep 'em coming!
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85








There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside of you.
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