This is the second, much vaguer version. I made it shorter and with less detail because I wanted to tease my audience. I want them to be curious since I felt that the first version was too detailed and too well informed that it may bore my audience making them think "this is cliche, I ain't reading".
again, every correction you give me gets me one step closer to actually finishing my story. with that, I appreciate your efforts and time in reviewing. thank you
Hi, I'd like a review on my 1st story--Topic 54552.
It's based on a video game for Wii called Super Smash Bros. Brawl, (SSBB for short) so if you haven't played the game's Adventure Mode and if you haven't beaten Tabuu yet, then know that my story is one huge spoiler. And it'll be extremely confusing if you haven't played Adventure Mode.
OK, thank you! I'm not sure if you know about SSBB, but...worth a try right?
"We're all born with selfish desires, so we can all relate to those feelings in others. But kindness is something made individually by each person...so it's easy to misunderstand when others are trying to be kind to you." --Fruits Basket Book 1, page 134
Hello! Um, I was wondering if maybe you could please review something for me...? :'D I saw a few pieces of your writing and I thought they were simply beautiful, so I was sort of hoping an experienced writer like you could tell a newbie like me how I was progressing. ^.^;;
Logan's is done! And Kammie, I was going do attempt yours this morning but then realised that I probably wouldn't do my best review at 7am. So expect it tonight
"It is curious how often you humans manage to obtain that which you do not want."
I saw you reviewed for my friend and was wondering if you could do one for me!
This is for thechocolatewritingcat's prompt contest and the prompt was "A beggar who likes to hear himself sing" and I think I did ok with it but I would love another review before I turn it in!
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