Hey, Yoyo! You really liked 'I Think I'm in Love' so I think you might also like Run, Fat Boy, Run!. This is just day one. It's been a blast to write. And I need some help with it!
Well, thanks for being friggen awesome all the time!
Thanks for all the requests! I will get to these soon. And I apologize for the delay but I've got an awfully and unusually busy weekend with my graduation and everything, but I will try to get all these done by next week Friday. And it's first-come, first-serve. Thanks for your patience!
~Yoyo
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This is the third chapter, as there are three pieces that precede it - as I told Ari, I don't expect you to critique those, but you can skim them if you'd like, none of them are long. If you don't want to do that, you could just critique the prologue, even though it's a bit old.
"Better keep yourself clean and bright; you are the window through which you must see the world." - G. B. Shaw Lynlyn's Magical Critique Emporium - request a review here.
Okay, wow. I'm back, I think. I tried to get to some of these, but my summer has been SO much busier than I expected, I had to skip a few. If I skipped yours and you still want a critique on it, just post again, and I'll do my best to get to it.
Remember, you are much more likely to get a poem critiqued than a story because I can do that in one sitting. But I will do my best to get to everyone! Thanks for stopping by!
If you need a crit, My Dawn With Fox (on my featured works) could use work. :]
--Medusa.
Alice: If I had a world of my own, everything would be nonsense. Nothing would be what it is because everything would be what it isn't. And contrary-wise; what it is it wouldn't be, and what it wouldn't be, it would. You see?
hey I just got a poem out and would love for you to check it out here it is:
topic33727.html it is called Above It and, i know that it is not the best poem in the world, but i was just wondering what i could fix. thank you
I just got a poem out and would love for you to check it out 
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