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Rabbit Syndrome



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Points: 1384
Reviews: 13
Wed Aug 05, 2009 8:45 am
Black Rabbit says...



Hello there. I think you're here because you wanted a review from me... and well, that is just awesome. :]


Feel free to ask me for anything!



Preferred Topics:

Poetry
Other/Romantic/Fantasy fiction
Lyrics



What I'd rather not critique:

Fanfiction
Sci-fi
Historical Fiction
Rated-R works
Character Biographies



What I focus on while reviewing:

+Nit-picks (like grammar, spelling, structure, awkwardly phrased sentences, etc...)
+Character Development
+Sequence of Events
+Believability
+Imagery (both stories and poetry)
+Consistency (both stories and poetry)
+Rhyme Scheme (poetry)
+Rhythm (poetry)



And most of all, your happiness. :]


Well, yeah, I'd review anything in spite of myself if it looks reaaaally really interesting. ;]


I know I'm not that skilled, but I will help you in the best way that I can. Believe me, I am not a harsh critic, and I can assure you I can be of some help to you when it comes to improving your writing. I'll try to review you in a span of three-five days, so please be patient with me. I have school. Still, I will be more than glad to help you! :]


What you should do:

Give me the link and genre of the piece you want to be reviewed.


What you shouldn't do:

Give me more than one piece of yours at a time. I will refuse to review more than one. After that one is finished, though, you can ask for more.


Payment:

I require none! :]



Go ahead, shoot at me! :]
["Don’t be so humble - you are not that great." - Golda Meir]
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13 Reviews



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Points: 1384
Reviews: 13
Wed Aug 05, 2009 9:49 am
Black Rabbit says...



*bump*
["Don’t be so humble - you are not that great." - Golda Meir]
Rabbit Syndrome - Get your FREE reviews here!
LINK:
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Reviews: 456
Wed Aug 05, 2009 7:57 pm
Rascalover says...



Hello,
Can you please review chapter 11 of my romantic fiction piece called Let Me Love You.

topic51810.html

The chapters before it consisted of the main character Isabella being in a car accident her boyfriend breaks up with her and she starts a relationship with her best friend and her ex-boyfriendsw cousin (same person). They go up to his cabin and have some fun, then she gets sick.


Pretty please review I give points :)

please and thank you,
Tiffany
There is nothing to writing; all you do is sit down at a typewriter and open a vein~ Red Smith

Who needs a review? :) http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic38078.html





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Reviews: 206
Thu Aug 06, 2009 2:07 am
Lil_Pau says...



Hiya!

Could you please review my poem 'Battlesphere?' It's for an assignment so I just want to know if there's anything I can improve.

Link: topic51723.html

Please and thanks! :D
Hope for the best, but prepare for the worst.





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Fri Aug 07, 2009 5:56 pm
Ellyphant says...



topic51834.html

There you go! Have fun.

Title: Anorexic Letters
Category: Narrative Poetry
You're more than wonderful
More than amazing
The irreplaceable
Love of my life
You're so incredible
In these arms tonight
The irreplaceable
Love of my life

-Love of My Life, Brian McKnight.





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Sat Aug 15, 2009 8:24 pm
fragile_heart(!) says...



Do you review photgraphy?

If so, here you are!





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Mon Aug 24, 2009 4:42 pm
ZannaShepherd says...



Hi,
I have a story that I really would like feedback on. It's the first part of a three part short story. Also a possible entry for the 'Once Upon a Time' contest. (It started as that but now it's way too long, that's why I'm splitting it up.)

Once Upon a Time
PG
Fantasy Fiction

topic51479.html

Thanks!
~Zanna
In order to write about life, first you must live it!

Ernest Hemingway

Hmm, must be why I only write fantasy, that's the only life I've ever lived.
~Zanna





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Mon Jun 12, 2023 12:00 pm
DreamyAlice says...



Hello, I am one of the res crew mods here on YWS. This is a message just to inform you that I will lock and archive this thread as it is not active anymore. We have to archive and lock the inactive threads to keep the forum organized so no worries if you'd like to reopen it at any point in the future please contact a current resources moderator, we would be happy to reopen it for you ^-^

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