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Sun Sep 17, 2017 8:46 pm
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Sun Sep 24, 2017 3:33 pm
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First Review

I love the music theme and I love how passionate your narrator is. I think it needs a really good spellcheck but I love your characterization. Some parts are a bit clunky and need rewriting, like the description of the room and the detail-by-detail description of the narrator getting ready in the morning. I really liked it though, and I would want to read more if there was more to hook me. Your title intrigued me though, and I think this could be good. I want to read the next part. :)


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Sun Sep 24, 2017 4:03 pm
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Second Review

I love this! I love your worldbuilding and your characterization! I can't wait to find out more about the Runes aspect and all the schools. I love your twists on traditional fantasy tropes. I also love your writing style; it's rich and literary and fits the subject perfectly.

The only complaint I have is the section where Aella is watching the Vale Rider. It's a bit long and waffley and you kinda lost me a bit there.

Please keep writing though!



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Thu Sep 28, 2017 3:17 pm
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Knight Darklady went on a pilgrimage to the land of Balance last night. She learned about internal weather and measuring her inner balance with a barometer.
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Thu Sep 28, 2017 3:19 pm
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Third Review

This is beautiful! It's well written, although I don't think you need as many speech marks as you have (let the speech run until it's finished, then close the speech marks, instead of opening new ones because it's a new lie). I love the story and I love the rhythm to it. I love the concept of the crow and the seabird meeting. I love the romance aspect. :)




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Thu Sep 28, 2017 3:27 pm
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Knight Darklady attempted to review a narrative poetic beast, but failed in her quest. Even Knights can't tame the ocean.

I really love this: I love the tone, the language, and it also really resonates with me. Your imagery is excellent.

The title doesn't do this justice at all though.

But, your writing is really, really good.

I particularly liked the imagery around sea-glass and the last stanza. It was a good end to a poem because it inspired the reader.


ETA: Knight Darklady received a message declaring this review to be a review! Darklady succeeded in slaying the ocean beast!
Last edited by darklady on Mon Mar 12, 2018 6:39 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Thu Sep 28, 2017 6:03 pm
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Knight Darklady beat the Gothi-Memory.

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Thu Sep 28, 2017 6:12 pm
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Mon Mar 12, 2018 6:40 pm
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Knight Darklady found her way out of the sudden darkness and back to her log!
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Mon Apr 02, 2018 10:35 am
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Knight Darklady is still alive but is bonding with her offline familiar, Sir Catface. Otherwise known as Kissy, the 6 year old tortoiseshell. Adopted from the RSPCA on 24th March 2018.
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