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So many strong moments in your napo so far Apricity! Always enjoy your work - and very much agree with Seirre that you definitely have some serious skills with making something that could sound so ordinary / inconsequential and making it poetic - like the coffee order poem especially!
In this last one, I love your use of the refrain at the beginning and end to book-end the poem, it sort of made me read the whole poem a second time through - and can be taken both lovingly, but ultimately bitterly. And also this line is so good: "i want to break us apart because what use is love when we're both blind to each other's light." <33
Looking forward to reading more! Thanks for writing!
In this last one, I love your use of the refrain at the beginning and end to book-end the poem, it sort of made me read the whole poem a second time through - and can be taken both lovingly, but ultimately bitterly. And also this line is so good: "i want to break us apart because what use is love when we're both blind to each other's light." <33
Looking forward to reading more! Thanks for writing!
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