YAY SOMEONE IS STILL READING!
Haha, I wondered if anyone would get the beard poem and I didn't want to put the title at the top because that would ruin the effect. You know, with the last one, I didn't deliberately intend to alternate light and dark, but I found it interesting that the alternating lines almost worked on their own.
Yeah, the last line initially was:
'and know that we are watched
with covetous eyes'
Which reads better than what it is now, but then is repetitious as I mention eyes earlier...maybe you're right and it should just go. ^_^
Thanks for the comment. I don't need constant commenting but every now and then a reminder that it's being read is nice, y'know.
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