7/10; It doesn't show any faults, and it allures the reader in to know what the gunshots and shouting is about, I just feel that there could be more to it..
A cloud of desperation, confusion and frustration loomed over his head as he paced back and forth on the wooden dock, which creaked beneath his weight. The air was heavy from this afternoon’s storm, and his heart was heavy with grief and despair.
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