Rate the first sentence above you

5/10

Though true the type of sentence is very overused and it reminds me of a flair on facebook.

No new thought is really new.

6/10

Somewhat interested in the 'thought', but I feel it is too plain to be an opening.

I love human.

8/10. Grabs your attention right away

Most of the invitees were blissfully unaware of the scandal taking place at the wedding.

8/9

I don't like the word 'invitees' 'guests' just sounds way more natural. I would love this to have some more description and be less straight forward.

Calligraphy didn't put one, so:

It didn't end the way it started.

6.9/10

I've seen that type of opening but the way you wrote it seemed intriguing.

here's mine:

After I finished Gottermann’s Concerto No. 1, I took the wooden arm and inserted it inside the mouth of my mannequin, in the posture of a Cello.

10/10
I'm going to go read this tomorrow. I'm too tired to read it today.
Here's mine:
The coffee shop, Esnatzen, was empty when Seres walked in; the moss green carpet shocking his feet.

100/10

reminds me that I still have to read the rest and that sentence has just always been my favorite. XD well after I read it of course. It has tons of imagery and it captures me.

Again only one thought was running through her head, pain.

9/10!
It captures my attention and it sounds like not only something I would read but something I would write lol.

"Sissy, there's someone in the house."

9/10. Makes me think of a small child and a murder mystery.

Mine:
My fingers, flaming red, burned in agony from the cold wind that wound around my body

7/10

I liked the imagery you created, but I'm not awfully keen on openings that begin with descriptions. It looks pretty interesting though.

(I'm aware that this isn't just one line... but there's only an extra 3... xD)

Austin told me that I’d forget about it. He said that it didn’t matter. That rainy October night, he told me that I had to run; running would stop my mind from crashing. Austin lied.

9/10 loved it all except for the rainy October night part it just seemed, I don't know, out of place.

And because you did I am going to do two sentences (this is from the short story I am writing to submit to the YWS newsletter. It is mostly just tongue and cheek humor.) :

When I swim in the pool Mom can’t make me take a bath, because I will get squeaky clean in the Doreen water. Doreen is my Grandma; I don’t think she can swim though.

A. S.

2/10 Far too vague. There's a bit of twist and conflict at the end, but it is so unrelated and makes me go "what in the world" too badly for me to really bother reading.

"I don't see why we should lose a daughter when guards can do a perfectly good job."

6/10 it's ok. Is almost an attention grabber, but just a little to weak.
Here's mine:

I shoved my hands against the door, watching the long nails scratch my wrist, leaving thin lines of blood.

7/10
Ehh... it's good, not remarkable, but good. It would certainly draw me in a bit. Better than anything that I could come up with definitely.

Well, here I go (I'm awful at grabbing people):
"Death's a b***h, especially when you have go through it about 5 times a day. But by now it had become a commonplace and mundane thing, much like brushing your teeth, checking your e-mail, or hearing about anorexic hotel heiresses on the news. "