Okay @ChesTacos I think you’re up next with Charlotte! : D
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I believe Yoshikrab may have said something a few messages ago saying what to do. I believe they suggested just having her trip on something or the like, and her getting a minor concussion so she’s unable to continue.
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winter you are an adorable bean and I love your bad social awareness xD ~Omni omni played robin hood, stole winter's brain cell ~Silver winter is the only person who would survive the machine uprising ~Europa
Yeah, since we’re going alphabetically and Thomas isn’t next after her then probably just Charlotte
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winter you are an adorable bean and I love your bad social awareness xD ~Omni omni played robin hood, stole winter's brain cell ~Silver winter is the only person who would survive the machine uprising ~Europa
Hey @ChesTacos! The post looks good! I had a few suggestions, but they’re optional and more to keep the consistency of the story going than anything.
They haven’t been assigned rooms yet or gotten their things from the plane, so it might be difficult for her to find her instrument and go somewhere to play. Rosetta is also technically next alphabetically, so it might make more sense if he called out for Rosetta to go and then she did something like slur her speech and revealed she had a concussion?
The only other thing I’d say is that I don’t think Aiden would say it was “cool.” You were right in that he would most certainly think that, but he’s trying to get Charlotte to trust him. It’s not working, but he’s trying, and he wouldn’t say it was cool because Rosetta is one of the only people who currently trusts him there, and he wouldn’t want to push her away.
Those are just thoughts but yeah. It looks great overall, so bravo! I’m seeing now that Thomas is up next so I guess you’ll be posting again.
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winter you are an adorable bean and I love your bad social awareness xD ~Omni omni played robin hood, stole winter's brain cell ~Silver winter is the only person who would survive the machine uprising ~Europa
He’d probably say something like “I can’t believe Catherine gave her a concussion.” He’d say it just loud enough for Catherine to hear, but he’d say it in a sincere way where it really sounded like he couldn’t believe it.
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winter you are an adorable bean and I love your bad social awareness xD ~Omni omni played robin hood, stole winter's brain cell ~Silver winter is the only person who would survive the machine uprising ~Europa
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