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Fri Apr 03, 2020 4:33 pm
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Fri Apr 03, 2020 7:05 pm
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Liberty says...



I'm excited to see some of your poems, Jade! There's a whole challenge and badge thing that motivates people to write poems to get cool badges too, if you wanna check that out. :)
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Fri Apr 03, 2020 10:40 pm
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Thanks @Liberty I’ll check it out ^^
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Fri Apr 10, 2020 6:11 pm
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Hey! I hope things are going well for you on the poetry writing front! Looking forward to seeing poems c:
"You know that I can't / Show you me / Give you me"
- The Truth Untold (BTS)
"Please give me a remedy / a melody"
- Jamais Vu (BTS)
"The lights illuminating your eyes / They're the me from now"
- Inner Child (BTS)
  





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Fri Apr 10, 2020 6:19 pm
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Thanks @Fraey =) I'm a bit behind and it's going slowly, but I'm proud of what I'm writing so far and hope to share it soon
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Fri Apr 10, 2020 7:26 pm
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Good to hear you're making progress! I look forward to seeing your poetry when you're ready to share!
  





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Sat Apr 11, 2020 3:41 am
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Ok, so debated scrapping this/ not posting because I wrote it ages ago and it just brings up sad memories but I edited it here's my first kinda late NaPo poem!!


I thought you'd always make me smile,

Thought you'd always be there.

Every day with you was beautiful.

Thought you knew I cared.


~~~


Beause I was planning our future,

And, oh, how hard I tried.

Now I can only say, "I knew her,"

You decided to die.


~~~


I don't think I'll ever stop crying.

I just thought you'd be here.

Now I'm going to your funeral,

'Cause you thought no one cared.
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Sat Apr 11, 2020 11:17 pm
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Ahhhh so great to see you've got a poem done! It's an interesting turn because the first verse sounds like it could be about a breakup, but then in the second verse the reader understands it's about a suicide, and the third verse teases out a potential sense of guilt on the part of the narrator for not being able to stop the other character from killing herself.
  





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Sat Apr 11, 2020 11:48 pm
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I think this poem was a neat read, just like BluesClues said. The reader can really get different emotions in every verse, and I like how the “Thought you knew I cared” was repeated by “‘Cause you thought no one cared.” Nicely done!
"You know that I can't / Show you me / Give you me"
- The Truth Untold (BTS)
"Please give me a remedy / a melody"
- Jamais Vu (BTS)
"The lights illuminating your eyes / They're the me from now"
- Inner Child (BTS)
  





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Sun Apr 12, 2020 1:31 am
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Your first NaPo poem for this month was great! It definitely explores a topic that I can personally relate to, and I thought that the contrast you created between the "thought you knew I cared" and the "cause you thought no one cared" was really neat. Keep up the good work!
And I love the thought of being with you,
or maybe it's the thought of not being so alone.


  





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Mon Apr 20, 2020 10:34 pm
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Catching up with projects,
Is just saving us from
How lonely we're feeling.

In all the announcements
Are shards of sharp horror
That won't be acknowledged.

Smiles are nostalgic,
We've forgot how to laugh,
We're unanimous in

A fear of tomorrow.


Yay more poetry that makes me cringe
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Mon Apr 20, 2020 10:39 pm
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Hey! Nice second poem you got here ^^

The comparisons/images of how today's world is so different than what it used to be, definitely is relatable, and I like the line of "Smiles are nostalgic" as that really touches upon the tone of a bit of fear and that people probably aren't smiling much like they used to. :,)
"You know that I can't / Show you me / Give you me"
- The Truth Untold (BTS)
"Please give me a remedy / a melody"
- Jamais Vu (BTS)
"The lights illuminating your eyes / They're the me from now"
- Inner Child (BTS)
  





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Mon Apr 20, 2020 11:03 pm
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BluesClues says...



That first line would TOTALLY SLAP except that I'm not lonely because I'm not home by myself! But I def see many people who are in lockdown alone getting lonelier as time goes on, so I think this is an astute observation!
  








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