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Fri Apr 03, 2020 2:31 pm
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Arcticus says...



[Poem #6 - "don't you wish?"]


وَأَنَّهُ هُوَ أَضْحَكَ وَأَبْكَىٰ
"that it is He who brings laughter and tears"

— The Quran [53:43]


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Fri Apr 03, 2020 4:21 pm
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Liberty says...



You know what's funny, Arc? My mom does an online Islamic course where she does the tafseer of ayahs from the Quran. Yesterday she did 30:22! The exact same one that one of your poems revolves around~

It's cool to read all your poems. :3

My favorite from "flashbacks: languages" is this bit -
and so by the time I was eight
I was already
lost in translation
absorbing Hindi
praying in Arabic
watching words appear like eye-floaters
'A's and alefs dancing in my thoughts


I'm eager to read more!
LadyBug is the best frister ever <3
(everyone please know that LadyBug's the coolest goose you will ever meet)
(this goose blushes too much)
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Sat Apr 04, 2020 10:14 am
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[Poem #7 - "remembrance"]


... فَاذْكُرُونِي أَذْكُرْكُمْ
"So remember Me; I will remember you..."

— The Quran [2:152]


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Sun Apr 05, 2020 12:25 am
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MeherazulAzim16 says...



Great work rate, Arc!

"Flashbacks: Languages" is my favorite of all poems you've posted so far. I was about to quote the same stanza as Lib

'A's and alefs dancing in my thoughts


It's a deservingly beautiful end to the poem.
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alliyah says...



Arc, I've been meaning to comment on these, they all feel so polished, and I could see this being like a real poetry book (and I'm not just saying that!). I'm really enjoying how you're able to take these religious themes, and communicate them with such personal touches, it makes them all seem like cherished little insights into the speaker's experience and are rich with memory.

I'm not sure which one is my favorite - they've all been enjoyable to read so far. Some of my favorite lines, "buttercheeked, says Mother /speaking nonsense / out of love", the whole depiction of Cain's lament & digging his brother's grave was striking, & "don't you wish what you're feeling would become the sky" --
maybe i make up colors for poetic cadence, but i don't think i can ever love someone who doesn't understand that teal is a different color than dark cyan
  





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Tuckster says...



Spoiler! :
Great job staying on track so far! Your poems have continued to be legitimately awe-inspiring. My favorite line from these past three poems was "God spoke in the hail that hurt // and the rains // that soothed the scars". It's a fantastic perspective on sanctification and God's character. Keep up the great poetry!
Power without love is reckless and abusive, and love without power is sentimental and anemic. Power at its best is love implementing the demands of justice, and justice at its best is power correcting everything that stands against love.
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Mon Apr 06, 2020 7:25 am
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[Poem #8 - "Bani Hawwa (Eve's children)"]


... وَمَا كَانَ النَّاسُ إِلَّا أُمَّةً وَاحِدَةً فَاخْتَلَفُوا
"Mankind was but one community, then they differed..."

— The Quran [10:19]


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Mon Apr 06, 2020 2:32 pm
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Spoiler! :
Arc, I absolutely love this last poem - something about the simplicity of "lyres sound just like lyres do" made me laugh out loud. This whole poem is expressing such a beautiful vision of unity and it's so refreshing.
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
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Tue Apr 07, 2020 2:29 pm
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[Poem #9 - tea-time kisses]


... هُنَّ لِبَاسٌ لَّكُمْ وَأَنتُمْ لِبَاسٌ لَّهُنَّ ...
"... they are your garments and ye are their garments ..."

— The Quran [2:187]


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Thu Apr 09, 2020 6:51 am
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[Poem #10 - transience]


... وَتَرَى الْجِبَالَ تَحْسَبُهَا جَامِدَةً وَهِيَ تَمُرُّ مَرَّ السَّحَابِ
"You see the mountains and think them firmly fixed.
But they shall pass away as the clouds pass away."


— The Quran [27:88]


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Fri Apr 10, 2020 2:40 am
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bluewaterlily says...



Arcticus, your imagery is always so beautiful, fresh, and original. You also have such clean formatting of your poetry. Your lines always flow and you're so descriptive but it's never too much or too scarce. You always seem to achieve equilibrium with the right amount of imagery and detail. Reading a poem from you always feels like taking a breath of fresh air.
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Fri Apr 10, 2020 6:12 pm
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MeherazulAzim16 says...



Reading your poetry is a treat. I agree with what everyone else has said. Your use of imagery is stunning. But really, what's amazing to me is that your poems always makes me feel something. I praised you on your work rate before, getting poetry into the thread regularly. But you're also efficient with your use of words. They always seem to serve a purpose. I'd say that's your strength.
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Sat Apr 11, 2020 6:45 am
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[Poem #11 - my enemy, my friend]


... عَسَى اللَّهُ أَن يَجْعَلَ بَيْنَكُمْ وَبَيْنَ الَّذِينَ عَادَيْتُم مِّنْهُم مَّوَدَّةً
"Perhaps God will bring about love between you and those whom ye hold as enemies..."

— The Quran [60:7]


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Sat Apr 11, 2020 2:35 pm
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I love the sweet simplicity of tea-time kisses.
  





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mckaylaam says...



Arcticus, all of the poems you've published here in this thread so far were truly lovely to read and have blown me away. My favorite one that's stuck with me, though, was your ninth poem "tea-time kisses" - I love the beautiful simplicity and playfulness of it. Keep up the amazing work!
And I love the thought of being with you,
or maybe it's the thought of not being so alone.


  








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