Missing Aiden: A Mystery Musical

I didn’t quite like the first one, maybe that is also part of why I’m so hesitant to comment because you said you’re already struggling with the NaPo thingy and now me, who knows nothing about poetry, dares to say that I didn’t like something I don’t understand?
I think the pictures are cute but they would be better if they had the same style? (Tho I do like the symbolism of Aiden being the only one in black and white)

I like the second poem a lot more :3 I think you get Chloe’s conflicting feelings across very well!

In the third one, I like that the father seems to recognize that something went wrong but not what exactly since he still has lines like “crying is forbidden”

I like how you can clearly see that each character has a different way of expressing themselves. It’s real obvious in Poem 4. I like the refrain of it! And Andrew also has some issues, huh? Telling the missing Aiden that he’s a drama queen and all, despite being clearly worried.

Oh I really like Gia’s poem. Mainly because that she has so much going on. Not believing her brother is dead despite putting together the funeral but also being twistedly glad that he’s gone because she finally has the spotlight for once in her life. It’s a nice callback to the first poem (which elevates that one more, in my opinion)

@Tikaya

Yay, you commented! I can't tell you enough how much I appreciate this, particularly since I'm aware of your reasonable aversion to poetry. Thank you, this is sure to get me going through that last push for Napo.

The first poem has some heavy medical reference, so I get the confusion. I thought it'd be a nice ode to his career choice. Sorry it didn't get across so well.. I basically tried to juxtapose Aiden with calcium and the people in his life as the parts of our body that need calcium to function. It's meant as an introduction, so the vagueness for the mystery was very much intentional.

Chloe's one is my personal favourite too! ;D It's so full of feelings ahhh

Crying is forbidden- was referring to the tough man sterotype that prevents him from expressing emotions openly, but I like your take.

And yes, I wanted to depict Andrew as a typical friend, thus the slight sassiness.. He was actually the most challenging to think through.

Agreed, Gia is definitely the most complicated of all (at least until this point)

I get your complain of the different styles, but I could find no design template that could capture all the different features I had in mind for all of them and unfortunately, I'm not artist. Trying to sing was change enough so I tried to take it easy here.

If you do decide to read the further poem, be sure to let me know what you ended up thinking of them as I so love your opinions on my writings. But no pressure really! Thanks again, this was just the encouragement I needed <3

Wow Alex! What a tremendous amount of thought and time has been put into this thread - it really shines through, we have not just poems, but audio recordings, AND visuals!! The flow of the visual poetry was really nice - it makes you read / understand the poem in a new way. You can tell there's a lot of depth behind the characters and their narratives within this thread too.

I think my favorite in your thread so far was the poem with the conversation regarding divorce - heavy subject, that hits home - but the interchange and the way it was formatted was really well done! "I see you and I see my undoing" (this line is weighty!)

Terrific job this NaPo - keep up the wonderful work, looking forward to reading where you go.