I'm really looking for a critical eyes to tell me what needs to change, what is not fluid, and what I can do better as far as descriptions, imagery, tension, and energy go.
Here's my portfolio. I've gotten reviews on the first two chapters, and I've workshopped them with my writing group and my editor as well. The third and fourth chapters, though, haven't had as much attention as the others. Would you mind skimming through the first two (you can review if you want) and get hard on the reviews on the third and fourth chapters? You can do it all if you want, I'm just looking for reviews on the third and fourth.
Thanks!
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