Hey, Rach! Can you please review this romance short story (well, I think it's partially romance, though I might change it to general fic.)? Here's a thousand cookies! It's for Skins' contest, and I've got some great feedback already but alas, I've yet to be graced by your review. Thanks in advance!
Tiger
P.S. Ribbit. Is. Completely. AWESOME.
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No one's liked this thread yet...? :O DEMONS. *likes*
Okay, you're gonna hate me times 1000 for this because I know you loathe reviewing things after loads of reviews before, but I shall ask anyway... Would you mind reviewing the fourth part of Stop and Stare for me...? I love you...
You see, although I have many reviews already, the post feels so lost and empty without your sexy frog/Ribbit. With even a tint of green froginess in it, the post's dreams will be fulfilled. Yes, posts have feelings too. (Plus, I've given it quite a big edit since my latest review on it)
Hello Rachael dearest! I know I've already sent you a PM with the link to part two of my short story, so I hope I'm not being a bother. I just thought I'd drop the request here as well, although by no means do you need to rush.
Thank you so much whenever you could grace it with your presence! Oh, and I'm sorry I couldn't get to your novel chapter today-- I'll read it tomorrow or Wednesday, and if I don't, send me an angry PM.
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This is my new novel called: Pens and Knives. It is an action/adventure novel with a touch (and I mean touch) of romance. I need a REALLY harsh review (or as harsh as ya' get) because I want to enter this in a contest. Ramble away!
Bada-bing! Could I please get a review on the above? Thanks!
I am nothing but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's or maybe like pocket candy that's just a bit too sweet.
I am nothing but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's or maybe like pocket candy that's just a bit too sweet.
I personally, would love to be your 100th review, because Ribbit is awesome.
I have one of my newest fantasy short stories here: topic80454.html And I was hoping to get a review on it. It's temporarily(?) called Wyvern, and it's essentially a story about what happens to a village when a wyvern relocates there after a forest fire, told from the perspective of a character (I don't specify the gender, but I believe that it's a girl) who has severely bad vision in a world where they don't have glasses or contacts or anything.
It's actually an edited version... And it's really long now because I added a scene. T-T In the first version, I was told that the wyvern wasn't evil-monster enough, basically, so what I'm wondering is if I succeeded in making it a little more fearsome this time around. Does it come across to the reader that the wyvern is the bad guy here?
Aside from that... *shrug* I'm not really sure about some of the changes I made, so any feedback is welcome. I'm hoping to find a happy medium sometime in the future, after I get a few more opinions. And, of course, I'd love some feedback on what you think of my writing style in general, how I can improve, etc. etc. One of my biggest problems is that I use lots of ellipses and fragments and stuff, so... Does it work, or is there something I can fix?
Thanks in advance!
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