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Fri May 20, 2016 1:11 am
ShadowPrincess16 says...



Hey all!

So, I posted Mage Chronicles Book One in Novel Workshop not too long ago and I'm really trying to edit it. My problem is that I need people to read and tell me what they think is wrong with it. I'm mainly looking for plot inconsistencies and character development issues. Grammar would be nice as well but you don't really have to go that far. Thanks in advance!

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Fri May 20, 2016 1:51 am
Carlito says...



I started to read this a while back and I never finished because I got too busy with other things! I'm going to have a lot more free time starting next week and I can go back to it for you :)
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Fri May 20, 2016 2:12 am
ShadowPrincess16 says...



Thanks! I remembered you had been reviewing it but I figured you'd gotten busy. (Or my writing was so terrible that you couldn't handle it. Lol.)
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Did you ever hear the Tragedy of Darth Plagueis the wise? I thought not. It's not a story the Jedi would tell you. It's a Sith legend. Darth Plagueis was a Dark Lord of the Sith, so powerful and so wise he could use the Force to influence the midichlorians to create life... He had such a knowledge of the dark side that he could even keep the ones he cared about from dying. The dark side of the Force is a pathway to many abilities some consider to be unnatural. He became so powerful... the only thing he was afraid of was losing his power, which eventually, of course, he did. Unfortunately, he taught his apprentice everything he knew, then his apprentice killed him in his sleep. It's ironic he could save others from death, but not himself.
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