This is my first short story. I wrote it today. I'd like honest critiques and suggestions. I made all the spelling and grammatical corrections to my best ability. But, if there's anything you find, I wouldn't mind changing it! I also registered on this site today, and I think it's great.
p.s. if you can come up with a title you will earn 10 points from me
[EDIT] p.p.s. I actually discovered that this website DOES somehow give and subtract points, and i'm not able to give you any. It was supposed to be a joke, really.
[EDIT #2] Short Story - post451733.html#451733
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