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I've been pretty happy with my last few chapters, but this one... not so happy. I'm painfully bad at reviewing my own stuff, so I would really appreciate some reviews. Can anyone tell me what's wrong with this please?
Can You See Me? Chapter One/Prologue
Can You See Me? Chapter Two ~ Part One
Can You See Me? Chapter Two ~ Part Two
Everyone says that a funeral is to celebrate someone’s life, but I disagree. Celebrations are meant to be happy. Christmas, birthdays, Easter, they’re all celebrations; not funerals. There’s nothing happy about a funeral.
I’d been spending a lot of my time behind doors lately, which included people on the other side calling me. It was a warm Spring day in the beginning of June, and I was lying on my bed, my iPod headphones blasting loud music into my ears. The afternoon sun was gleaming through the vertical blinds on my window, and I could smell the fresh sea air as it circled my bedroom. It was as if the pleasant weather was mocking me, mocking today. Mocking me because today was the day of my parents' funeral.
I could hear my uncle, Damien, calling me from the other side of my bedroom door. Although, his voice was more or less drained out by the voice of Tom DeLonge, blaring from my iPod. The wake was going on downstairs, but I didn’t want to be a part of it. Damien had only just managed to get me to go to the funeral, which was absolutely terrible. The cemetery was full of dead people-literally.
Five or so minutes had passed and my uncle was still at the door. Why did I even need to go downstairs? It would only involve a load of people staring at me with sympathetic eyes. Although, I knew what would really be going through their minds when they saw me. It's his fault, we wouldn't even be here if it wasn't for him. I shook the negative thoughts out of my head.
“Max,” Damien called, “Just come downstairs for half an hour?”
He wasn’t going to give up, was he? Sighing heavily, I paused my iPod before switching it off. Throwing it carelessly onto the floor, I stood up. Half an hour wouldn’t hurt, would it?
“Happy?” I mumbled as I opened the door, forcing my uncle to step backwards.
He smiled at me, but it was obviously forced. Damien was still talking as I dragged my feet down the stairs. As I stepped into my living room, I saw a crowd of familiar faces. To be honest, I wasn’t happy to see any of them. The two faces that I wanted to see were gone; forever.
“Maxxie!” My sister exclaimed, turning to me. “Damien finally got you downstairs.”
“Yeah,” I muttered, sitting on the sofa.
Lisa had asked some of her friends around, which actually really annoyed me. It was a wake, not a birthday party. She’d asked me to invite some friends around as well, but I immediately said no. I only had two friends anyway, so I was hardly missing out.
“Do you want me to get you something to eat?” Lisa asked, sitting next to me.
“Lisa, I’m sixteen,” I snapped rudely. “If I want food, I’ll get it myself. I am capable, you know. It’s not like I’ve died.”
Gritting my teeth, I shot up and left the room. I heard her call after me, but I didn’t bother turning around. Instead, I just walked into my kitchen.
The kitchen was full, too, although there were a lot more kids than adults in there. They were all crowded around the snack table, asking their parents for every sweet thing that was placed in front of them. Rolling my eyes as the parents gave in to their children, I headed over to the drinks table. Not caring if anyone saw, I grabbed a big bottle of vodka.
As I was about to leave the room, something distracted me. Standing in the doorway was my sister. Just leave me alone, I thought to myself as I heard her shout my name.
“Maxxie!” she called in a high pitched voice.
Gritting my teeth, I glared at her. “What?”
Lisa weaved her way in and out of a few people, before standing in front of me. She was followed by one of her bleach blonde friends, who looked absolutely bored.
“Are you okay?” Lisa spoke softly.
“Yep! Fine, perfect!” I spat in her face. “Never been better!”
Lisa simply stared at me, shocked. Her friend, on the other hand, looked awkward. Why couldn’t Lisa leave me alone? Did she have to follow me everywhere? I sighed heavily; I knew I’d regret leaving my room.
Rolling my eyes, I shoved my way past my sister and walked towards the kitchen door. I headed into my hallway, still holding the clear bottle of vodka. Ten seconds later, I'd left my house.
It was nice to be outside. I hadn’t really been outside in a while, not properly anyway. As I strolled along the pavement, an uncomfortable feeling began to grow in my stomach. Maybe I had been a bit hard on my sister...
I sighed heavily as I kicked a small stone onto the road, before sitting on the grey pavement. I knew for a fact that my sister would come and find me soon, so what I also knew was that I had to make the most of my time alone. Closing my eyes, I leaned back, eventually lying down.
“You shouldn’t take it out on Lisa, you know.”
I quickly opened my eyes to see Annabel lying down next to me, her white summer dress spread across the tarmac floor.
“I know,” I mumbled, shutting my eyes again.
I didn’t know what was wrong with me. I just felt so angry. I knew it was stupid, but I couldn’t help it. Annabel had begun humming her usual tune when I thought of something. Hastily sitting up and opening my eyes, I turned to her.
“Have you seen them?” I spoke quickly. “Are they here? Where are they?”
Obviously knowing who I was talking about, Annabel looked at me softly.
“No.” She shook her head. “Mum and dad have probably moved on. Or at least, I hope they have.” She was suddenly standing beside me.
I knew that it was selfish, but I wished that they hadn’t moved on. I wanted them to be earthbound. I wanted to see them, I needed to see them. Even if it was for a matter of seconds. The past few weeks had felt like a dream; none of it seemed real. If I saw them, I knew that it would make everything real. I knew it would help me move on.
“It’s all my fault,” I whispered, more to myself really.
“No it’s not,” Annabel replied. “Don’t think like that.”
She was trying to make me feel better, but Annabel knew as well as I did that she was lying. What happened to my parents was my fault, everyone knew that. Even though no one said it, they all thought it.
My parents were on their way to the music store to buy some stupid guitar that I wanted. No one really knew what happened exactly, there weren’t any witnesses. All they knew was that somewhere along the way, the car crashed. That was it. One stupid accident wrecked everything. And if it wasn’t for me, none of it would have happened.
Forcing myself not to cry, I shut my eyes.
“Why does everyone keep saying that?” I muttered. “Why can’t you just hate me? That’s what I deserve.”
When I heard nothing but silence, I thought that she actually agreed with what I said. I realised I was wrong when seconds later, I heard a man’s deep voice.
“Oi! Get off my driveway!” he shouted. “Jesus Christ! You kids have no respect anymore!”
Rolling my eyes, I picked up the bottle of vodka and stood up. As I turned around, I saw a balding middle-aged man standing in the doorway of the house in front of me.
As he continued to call me everything under the sun, I casually continued to stroll along the pavement. I could still hear him when I was a good hundred yards away. It was times like this when I wished I had my iPod.
What was the point anymore? My sister was all that I had now, and it wasn’t like we got along. What I hated even more was the fact that she was lying to me. I knew that she blamed me for what happened to mum and dad; I definitely did. If I knew that it was my fault, I was pretty sure that everyone else did too.
I carried on walking until I reached the opening where the pavement cut off into a wooded area. The sun had began to set now, so there were small beams of light peering through the witch-like branches of the old trees.
Ignoring the world around me, I leaned against one of the old oak trees and slowly slid down until I was sitting on the muddy ground below me. Lifting the bottle of unopened vodka in front of my face, I observed it carefully. I’d never really drunk before; the most I’d ever had was a few cans of Strongbow at a house party. Oh well, I had to start sometime.
After unscrewing the plastic lid, I lifted the bottle to my mouth, taking a small sip of the clear drink. I flinched as the bitter, hot liquid slid down my dry throat. After the burning sensation had disappeared, I took another sip. I grinned slightly. This time, it gave me a short buzz, almost like electricity racing through my body.
So I took another sip. And then another.
After another few sips, I could feel my worries and anxieties slowly fade away. My thin lips turned into a small, relieved smile. I was feeling the happiest I’d felt in a very long time. It was amazing what a bit of alcohol did to you.
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