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Alrighty then!!
Dorian, are you the one adding all the spices to our food?
Of course I am.
Why?
Because frankly the food here tastes like poorly cooked sawdust. It genuinely tastes how Solas looks.




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OK, officially Miles is not dead. Due to me missing a section of Andraya's post I didn't see that the door was caved in. So @Iggy and I will both be revising our last posts. *Troops off to do so*




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Troops off. Messy you are so adorable it hurts.
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Ok, I'm having a seriously terrible mental blank ... which character is left handed??
Dorian, are you the one adding all the spices to our food?
Of course I am.
Why?
Because frankly the food here tastes like poorly cooked sawdust. It genuinely tastes how Solas looks.




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Just so you all know, this SB is the bomb! I am enjoying this so much and happy to see that it is still progressing.




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@basilthecat and @Messenger, I rewrote my post. You can read it here - http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=7&t=98865&start=30#p1185721

I look forward to seeing Andraya's next post, Basil, :)
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I liked it a lot Iggy Marco is funny, even though he appears tough.




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I think we should have a small discussion about where this is going because everyone seems to know what's going on except me xD And every time I come to write I have to stop because I don't know what to say.
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I agree. I was actually just thinking of that. It seems like the major climax is over. Everyone has just about met up. (Side note: Wouldn't someone at least think about killing Morgan in Basil's last post? He is there enemy who is ruthlessly chasing them. )

I am thinking we should run into a group of rescue crew members or something. Something big needs to happen. So far it's just been survive.




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Well isn't that what the whole SB's about? Surviving. There's so much happening and so quickly. We're burning through ideas here and I just think there's a small bit of cool down needed before another major thing.

Maybe small conflicts and no more attacks.

Just a suggestion.
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I agree with Reise! Something simple. We should also add in a little more humour, I think.
And @Messenger because Morgan was struck in the face with a plank of wood and fell down the stairs, it would have been assumed that he's dead. I don't know if @Craz has anything in mind, so I left Morgan's "death" vague.
@Iggy good post! I'll have something up after someone else posts ;)
Dorian, are you the one adding all the spices to our food?
Of course I am.
Why?
Because frankly the food here tastes like poorly cooked sawdust. It genuinely tastes how Solas looks.




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Unless everyone agrees that the Storybook should end shortly after everyone is together, I had an idea that the group should start looking for a refuge camp. Since the majority of characters are seeking family members, I would think the refuge camp would hold something more than just safety. Depending on if we want to go further than that, the camp can be in horrible condition or just the rescue our characters need. But I do agree on the more internal conflict within the group.

@BasiltheCat what do you think about once everyone is together that Andraya goes after Gale because of Jet?
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I like that idea of a refuge camp!!

But Craz, I don't know what you mean by Andraya going after Gale because of Jet. If anything, Andraya would thank Gale for keeping her brother alive.
Dorian, are you the one adding all the spices to our food?
Of course I am.
Why?
Because frankly the food here tastes like poorly cooked sawdust. It genuinely tastes how Solas looks.




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Well, I thought that she would partly blame him because his former group did nearly kill Jet. Not forever, but just when they first meet.
"we'll fasten it with some safety pins and tape and a dream, and you're good to go, honey."



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