A Proverbs 31 Women

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A Proverbs 31 Women.

A virtuous women is priceless
For they are few and far in between.
Her home is run smooth and viceless,
A tidier one never seen.

The heart of her husband in her doeth trust,
She will do him good all of his life.
Her dealings with others are kind and just.
O to be such a wife!

Her family is clothed in scarlet and silk,
Which she has skillfully sewn.
To the needy she gives bread and milk,
And in the gates her husband is known.

By her husband and childern she is adored
But she is not puffed up with pride,
For she is a women that feareth the Lord,
And under his wing doeth she hide.


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This poem was written based on these scriptures, Proverbs 31:10-31. I wrote this poem for a contest in a chirstian newsletter over a year ago and thought I might post in here. Hope you liked it.

10Who can find a virtuous woman? for her price is far above rubies.

11The heart of her husband doth safely trust in her, so that he shall have no need of spoil.

12She will do him good and not evil all the days of her life.

13She seeketh wool, and flax, and worketh willingly with her hands.

14She is like the merchants' ships; she bringeth her food from afar.

15She riseth also while it is yet night, and giveth meat to her household, and a portion to her maidens.

16She considereth a field, and buyeth it: with the fruit of her hands she planteth a vineyard.

17She girdeth her loins with strength, and strengtheneth her arms.

18She perceiveth that her merchandise is good: her candle goeth not out by night.

19She layeth her hands to the spindle, and her hands hold the distaff.

20She stretcheth out her hand to the poor; yea, she reacheth forth her hands to the needy.

21She is not afraid of the snow for her household: for all her household are clothed with scarlet.

22She maketh herself coverings of tapestry; her clothing is silk and purple.

23Her husband is known in the gates, when he sitteth among the elders of the land.

24She maketh fine linen, and selleth it; and delivereth girdles unto the merchant.

25Strength and honour are her clothing; and she shall rejoice in time to come.

26She openeth her mouth with wisdom; and in her tongue is the law of kindness.

27She looketh well to the ways of her household, and eateth not the bread of idleness.

28Her children arise up, and call her blessed; her husband also, and he praiseth her.

29Many daughters have done virtuously, but thou excellest them all.

30Favour is deceitful, and beauty is vain: but a woman that feareth the LORD, she shall be praised.

31Give her of the fruit of her hands; and let her own works praise her in the gates. Proverbs 31:10-31 kjv
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The book of Proverbs is my favorite book from the Bible, so I am very pleased to see this poem. There are a couple things though, which would help the poem.

"Which she has skillfully sew


Should be "sewn" to match the "known" later in the stanza.

I'm a little concerned by the archaic spellings, i.e. "doeth" and "feareth." I know it is to copy the biblical style, but I can't help thinking that the spelling distracts from the content. "Does" and "fears" do the job without drawing attention to themselves. This is just a minor style point, they are perfectly acceptable as they are.

All in all, I will like the poem. If you decide to do other poems based on proverbs, just let me know.
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DG, once again, you have created a wonderful poem. :) I love the Proverbs 31 woman, but you took her to a whole new level. While I was reading this, I was matching up the verses with them. xD I love the words you used to describe her. Keep up the good work.
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