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Welcome, Penguin! I'm Sumi, feel free to PM me if you have any questions on the site.

You won't be short of -and here I quote you-- "constructive criticism" on here. It's our highest priority, after all. So long as you crit others, they'll return the favor.

Mostly. LOL.

Have fun!

sumi

Indeed, twas my own persisten urging le penguin mentioned. So good to see you have arrived in earnest; no doubt the people and site shall live up to my high recommendation.

*turns to gathering*

WONT YOU? *shakes fist angrily*

She has the Sinister Jigster's seal of approval, and thus all must be welcoming.

Hi, my name is Emily. Writing is my passion and I was surprised and extremely happy to find this website full of other young writers!

Ahoy, Emily! Welcome aboard YWS!

I'm Razorblade, and feel free to PM me with questions about the site, if you want a critique (preferably of fiction work, I'm terrible at poetry), or if you just want a dose of my insanity.

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Hello,

Hi my name clover.you can call me clove.i like writing not that much but i like it.after i found this site which my brother showed me. i was happy.

Hey, you have the same avatar as Mesh does.

Anyway, welcome to the site! I'm Razorblade, PM me with any questions you have, or if you want a fiction critique, or if you just want to chat.

-St. Razorblade

Hey....... isnt that my sister?

Hey y'all, I'm Happy.
I am new to all this, but I was excited to find a writing community online outside Nanowrimo.

Heya happy and welcome to YWS!!

Hope you like it here!

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Welcome all new members and I hope you enjoy the site. If you'd like someone to take a look at your work or you're having trouble finding your way around, feel free to pm me,

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Hey, my name is fothi.. I just registered. I will probably hanging around here quite a bit. There used to be a place like this that I went to all the time, but it got shut down. So, I'm really happy to find this place... I write a lot of poetry, some nonfiction essays, and fiction short stories. And I consider myself to be pretty good at giving concrit, but I expect everyone to be too. See you around!

Ahoy Fothi! Welcome aboard YWS!

Oh you will be hanging around here quite a bit. This place is addictive.

Anyway, I'm Razorblade. Feel free to PM me with questions about the site, a request for a fiction critique, or if you just want to chat for a while. =)

-St. Razorblade
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Welcome to YWS fothi.

Oh you will be hanging around here quite a bit. This place is addictive

It is only to those who like writing. I checked the registered users and found out that there were about a hundred users who aren't active or given even 1 post.

Salut! Mon nom est Prakash and I reside in Montreal, Canada. I am majoring in Psychology at le Universite de Concordia. I really enjoy writing movie and video game reviews. I also freestyle on occassion. I have been tortured by visions of a prospective movie quardilogy for the last year. Music tends to trigger the visions. Anywho, I finally said, "Enough is enough", and took matters into my own hands by writing a synopsis transcript for the first "potential movie." Please let me know if you think its movie material. Also, please check out some of my video game reviews and let me know if I have what it takes to make it into the video game journalism industry. Please excuse my limited English.

A la prochaine
Le chevalier noir
I actually concocted a 4-part quadrilogy. In movie I ("Legends of Promethia: Preluda Termina"), Gabriel and Michael’s space pod crash lands near the vicinity of the Promethean guardian, Maxsimus. Maxsimus takes the two infants into his care and raises them as his own. Gabriel and Michael's biological parents were killed with the rest of their race on Planet Gaia when Thanatos (a megalomaniacal, nefarious tyrant) decimated it with his "mark of fate" attack. The reason why he destroyed the planet is because his oracle prophesized that one of their kind (The Edenians) would destroy him. Michael and Gabriel's parents anticipated the apocalypse and so they sent them to a distant planet for refuge (e.g., Promethia). The two brothers grow older and learn about the ways of the world, and all its flaws and hypocrisy. They realize that it is their destiny to create benevolent systemic change in the world. Indeed, the world is an evil place not because of evildoers but because of those who stand idle and do nothing. A huge revolution scene ensues soon thereafter. Africa's poverty system is shattered; communism and the Czar fall; the Aids pandemic is neutralized; capitalism undergoes a metamorphosis and becomes a hybrid of neo-socialism and "bona-fide" new-gen "fascism"; Al Qaeda and other warmongering factions are terminated one by one; funds are siphoned from the egregiously affluent to the wretchedly destitute; free universal health care and free formal education are standardized; hybrid ethanol fueled vehicles become the norm; the holes in the ozone layer are patched up via Michael’s “Hydro-Frost” beam; and so on and so forth. The brothers will not take the "Superman" approach to the revolution. Vigilante justice? Diplomacy be damned. After 3 brutally long years, the world becomes a veritable utopia.

Now its time for some fun! Gabriel and Michael’s "birth-day" celebration is underway. (Their father told them it was on August 12th [De facto, the day they landed on Promethia as infants].)Gabriel and Michael love to compete, but have the utmost respect for one other. The 4-part movie series will focus mainly on their altruistic, gemeinschaft relationship with each other. Anywho, to celebrate their 18th birthday’s they breakdance/battle at a club, engage in some thrilling parkour; purchase an X-Box 360 and a copy of Gears of War; and just have a blast kicking ass. I don’t want to create clichéd superheroes in my story. I want them to be bad-ass yet emphatic; brilliant yet colloquial; and suave yet nonchalant: in sum, a conglomeration of paradoxes for it is part of the human condition. Moreover, the two brothers struggle with their duties as sons, heroes, students, and workers. Michael is part of the Big Brothers organization and decides to become an anti-viral chemist after his young gamin friend dies of leukemia in front of his eyes. Gabriel wants to be a novelist but he also has a flair for composing music and writing charming ballads. Michael and Gabriel are dichotomized by one fundamental difference: Michael is a pacifistic diplomat while Gabriel is a no-nonsense, ironic justice oriented, pathological sadist. That is, Gabriel enjoys killing wrongdoers with disturbing macabre twists. For instance, in one scene a 10 month old infant is charred by flames ignited by a flaring pyromaniac. Since Gabriel is a telepath, he hones in on the mind-signal of the arsonist via esp. and captures the bastard. Gabriel chimes, “Since you like fire so much, why don’t you bathe in it?” Gabriel then flambé’s a garbage can and throws the arsonist into it, as the fumes of hatred permeate the air with the stench of death. In another scene Gabriel and an underground conspirator guild ratchet up a plethora of pedophiles in rungs and unleash flesh-starved lycanthropic rats on them to “purify their Eiffel Towers” if you get my drift.

We will now discuss Michael and his compassion for humanity. While Michael and his pals are about to fire up SOE for a frag-em-up Killzone schlokfest, Channel 666 news shows a young lady being held hostage by a deluded terrorist. Michael arrives on the scene, freezes time with his “Kodak Moment” incantation and approaches the petrified terrorist. Michael then delves into the psychopath’s mind using his “Retro-Clairvoyance” necromancy spell and realizes that the man had a sick and twisted past: His father and mother were murdered before his eyes; his foster mother molested him and his sister who was later killed in a hit and run; his depression led to drugs which led to drug dependency; and this in turn led him to a life of crime to pay for his addiction. Michael pities the poor man and gives him $20,000 and a new lease on life. This same man later becomes a respected businessman and we will encounter him in the third movie, “Legends of Promethia: Fallen Angel.”

Most of the movie will focus on introspection, characterization, emotive discourse, filial love, divine piety, political intrigue, and other issues that draw parallels to our bleak reality. Throw in a couple of scenes at their school, b-ball court, work places, home, and church for good measure. Did I mention that Michael is a devout Christian while Gabriel is more of a secular, arrogant humanist? You can imagine the conversations they have on abortion, celibacy, and the existence of a higher power! There is also this really neat tournament that occurs once a year on Promethia where all the mightiest warriors in the universe duel blades and fists for cosmic supremacy. Maxsimus won the tournament two years ago and became the undisputed “Heavyweight Champion of the Universe”, but later lost to his son, Michael. Michael then faced Gabriel and beat the bejessus out of him like C-smock rounds do Kevlar. Did I mention that Michael is far more powerful than his brother and is essentially better than him in every mentionable regard? Maybe it has something to do with the pureness of his heart and his unrelenting WASP ethic. The tournament in the movie will involve the rematch between Gabriel and Michael for the heavyweight championship. Their best friends, Daniel and Alexander Phoenix, will also be part of the tournament, amongst several others. Daniel is Michael’s protégé while Alex is affiliated with Gabriel’s crew. I think Wrestlemania theatrics, and matrix meets Dragonball fight sequences would be the perfect combination to up the ante on the epicness of the tournament.

Anyway, Michael wins handily yet again and gives his injured brother a “panabena” (panacea + bean) to heal his wounds. Michael donates the 50 million dollars he won to charity, as usual: Money is the root of all evil and is the manifestation of primordial vice. Damn, there are so many more details and meticulous minutia I could delve into, but I know your time is precious so I’ll rap movie one up. A massive demonic beast ravages France, and Gabe and Mike duke it out with it using their divine melee blades, “Damage Ascension” and “Rough Divide.” Until that moment, they had never encountered anything paranormal. What is this thing? The ominous messenger of death? They manage to destroy it but millions are killed in the process. Gabriel is also nearly killed in the skirmish. A week later Gabriel and Michael go to watch the latest Superman movie (e.g., Superman Returns) and are debating over whether Goku or Superman would win in a fight and which character is more intriguing. They then turn on the radio (of their solar powered car) and a news feed dictates that all of India and China has been obliterated by a seemingly omnipotent mystic force!!! As Michael is more powerful he tells his brother he is going to investigate the matter. A dejected Gabriel returns home to confront his father Maxsimus. He never understood why he was always in his brothers shadow, playing second fiddle regardless of his efforts to ascend past the status-quo. Crestfallen, Maxsimus informs Gabriel of a way that he can become more powerful and leads him through an esoteric passage. Maxsimus has an ulterior motive: namely, if Michael fails to defeat the enigmatic force that has annihilated Asia, Gabriel would stand as the last defense against the malevolent ethereal daemon. Maxsimus shows his son the “Acceleron Magnus Chamber.” The chamber contains an alternate dimension where 7 years equal to 7 days in earth time. The training session initiated within the chamber is run by an unquenchable demon who desires warrior souls. Only Maxsimus had survived the brutal training session and it was with the newfound power than he obtained that he was able to become the Promethean guardian. There are three levels of “difficulty” in the chamber. They are strength, power, and supremacy, with supremacy being the most arduous. Maxsimus survived the “strength” campaign and tells his son to enlist in the same. An angry and tortured soul enters the chamber and selects “power” against his father’s wishes.
Meanwhile, a flabbergasted and melancholic Michael witnesses the most cataclysmic scene of death and bloodshed ever witnessed on screen. A soiled, bloody toddler emerges from some rubble and approaches Michael, bellowing with morose induced tears. Michael uses his transport telekinesis abilities to transfer his bed to the scene of carnage and tells the child to rest on it while he contemplates what to do next. Michael queries, “Who could have committed such an atrocity?” to which a gargantuan being muses, “Looking for me?” The “thing” that stands before him is Thanatos, the sadistic brute that destroyed his home planet. A revelatory scene ensues where Michael learns of his true origins. “The prophecy will not be fulfilled” grunts Thanatos. He then kills the innocent little child. “You wretched swine, she was but an infant!” Michael roars. “All human’s are puerile scum…why should I discriminate?” chimes Thanatos. Michael wants to kill Thanatos but doesn’t want to risk the total annihilation of the planet. Ergo, Thanatos creates a portal that serves as a catalyst to a desolate, barren, dystopia that Thanatos calls “Dante’s Inferno.” The greatest battle in cinematic history ensues that makes the “Big Burly Brawl” from the Matrix Revolution’s look like amateur You Tube sludge. Michael manages to dismember Thanatos with his enchanted Rough Divide and his signature blitzkrieg “Apocalyptica.” The prophecy has been fulfilled. However, Thanatos concocted a ruse and became Michael’s architect of demise. A titanic bomb was implanted in the planet’s core and if Michael doesn’t find the gateway back to Promethia he will die with the impending explosion, for Edenians cannot “breathe” in space. A detonation scene ensues as cosmic fires and scenic lighting bolts set the skies alight. Michael desperately tries to find the portal but to no avail: he dies in a pool of blanche light. A devastated Maxsimus (who can see universal affairs with his powers) falls to the ground and states, “Not like this.” There is no victory without sacrifice. Credits roll. If you are interested in reading parts 2-4, please email me at prakashtheman@hotmail.com for the transcripts. Thank you for reading.

Whoa, whoa too much and in the wrong place!

Hello, I'm Shireling and welcome to YWS, Prakash aka godofwar2k6.

It sounds like you have some good ideas in there for a movie, it sounds like an anime film to me. This thread is really just for welcoming new members though. If you want some feedback try putting your ideas out in another forum of the site. Maybe the 'Fiction Discussion & Tips' found in the literary section here.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewforum.php?f=74

Your English wasn't too bad actually for a rough draft/outline of ideas. Is French your first language incidentally? There is a thread devoted to speaking entirely in that language it's here I think.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=17948

Although most of the people there seem to be using the google translator and just having fun with the language, but they would probably love to have someone who knew the language to talk to.

Again welcome to an excellent site, the people around here are quite friendly and I'm sure you'll get more than enough suggestions for your movie script.

Hope this helps,

Your Friendly Neighborhood Hobbit