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I am named for
a tiny Slavic woman who nonetheless was
the terror of her household, her
tall sons,
who grew bent and white
in her old age and died
a centenarian,
thirty years after her friends
and husband had all died too,

and I am named for
a Quebec man who changed his name
to Anderson from the French,
Henrichon,
because it sounded
too French
and he would not be able to find work
in the States if
his surname was too French
and so Andrew and not Henri
became a name for his sons,

and I am not named for
Italian and German,
but they are in me too, as
pasta and stroganoff and sauerkraut
and the memories of
a bright-eyed grandmother who fed
everyone,
mangia!
and a tall grandfather who wears
flannel shirts and writes,

like I do.




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Sweet poem, but I think there was one recurring error that I noticed in particular:
BlueAfrica wrote:I am named for

I think it should be 'named after' as this makes more sense and as far as I know is more grammatically correct. The rest was really good though, and I particularly like the last line - it just brings the whole thing together wonderfully.
Great job and keep on typing :)
Icy.




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I am named for

The beginning threw me off. I believe the correct term would be 'I am named after'.

a tiny Slavic woman who nonetheless was

I think you could use a better word then 'tiny'. It doesn't fit very well, and could be more specific.

Overall, it was a very nice poem. It flowed well, and there weren't many choppy parts. I enjoyed reading it, great job. :)




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Very nice poem! Love the whole meaning of it. But I will agree with the other reviews,
I am named for
threw me off. Since that was the first line, I was confused at the beginning but soon came to realize what you actually meant. Maybe consider revising? Other than that, it was really wonderful.



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