The Want

The Want

It feels so strong,
Pulsing inside,
Gently at first,
Then consuming.

You don’t know it.
I didn’t once.
I recognized
It much too late.

Something felt wrong.
Lots of anger,
But sadness, too,
And anxiety.

Normal emotions.
Become extreme.
Control our souls.
As we lose more.

Our true lives fade.
The urges win out.
We bite, burn, binge,
And kill ourselves.

The desire
To endure pain,
Then end the pain,
And die forever.

It feels so strong,
Pulsing inside,
Gently at first,
Then consuming.

You don’t know it.
I didn’t once. (as there's no rhyme here anyway- I'd suggest putting this line differently. maybe: 'neither did I')
I recognized
It much too late. (I'd offer moving the It a line up: 'I recognized It\much to late')

Something felt wrong.
Lots of anger,
But sadness, too,
And anxiety. (I didn't really like the emotion description here- I think you should try something that's less like a grocery list)

Normal emotions-
Become extreme,
Control our souls-
As we lose more.(lose more what?)

Our true lives fade,
The urges win out.(the urges win out sounds a bit improper to me)
We bite, burn, binge,(binge? It's a bit undramatic- don't you think?)
And kill ourselves.(maybe destroy rather than kill, also- try and replace 'and' with 'then')

The desire
To endure pain-
Then end the pain,
And die forever.

I loved it, Though I offered some ideas of my own, feel free to ignore them, they really are more of a personal suggestion then a repairing mostly- It's a great poem, not a 'I'm a super-emotional guy- boohoo me' kind of poem which sometimes annoys me- but a strong, dry tough poem, that is emotional, but not whiny.

Great job!

Good poem. It would have been perfect if the punctuations were fixed right. The commas and full-stops disrupted the flow of the poem while reading.