Delusion

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Aow, this so very beautifully written! Your use of words, and the way you build up yours sentences, each line is as powerful and I was hooked after the first three words! The theme may be kind of cliché but you made it your own and in many ways it was both original and creative! I love every line and every word... except maybe for where you wrote "evermore" where I think it would sound better if you wrote "anymore" :p But other than that I have got no complaints what so ever! Amazing, amazing poem!

7/5 icky, sticky spiders for this! I was stunned, speachless, so amazed!

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness
"Some say the world will end in fire;
Some say in ice.
From what I've tasted of desire
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great
And would suffice." - Robert Frost



i could be a morning person if morning happened around noon.
— Fern