I like that you've posted a chapter in three parts - the length makes it a lot more appealing to look at. Considering you haven't any other reviews I will grant you one now but I suggest going and informing those who have read your previous work on this novel because they will be able to comment much better on the pace of the story than I can.
nativecatcher wrote:“I don’t know maybe because we have new students” she said with a fake attitude.
In speech, a comma is placed between what is being said and who has said it. This means this sentence should go like this. "I don't know. Maybe because we have new students," she said with a fake attitude. Also, I don't like the description here. Maybe instead describe it as 'she said sarcastically.' ? It sounds much more professional. There weren't any other grammer issues I could spot, but I found that a lot of your dialogue was choppy - very much like tennis match in being backwards and forwards without any real description in it. Whilst converstaion can be a great aid to moving along a chapter you need to try to find a balance.
This review is a completely pointless review whose purpose is to be a review only in characters because nobody can rightly review a piece that has been deleted, and seeing as how this piece has been in the Works with 1 Review queue for quite some time, standing in the way of bringing the count in said queue down to zero, here I am giving this a non-review review on a Review Day to knock it out of the queue.
Though if you ever do repost this chapter (in however many parts), I'd be more than happy to give it a proper review, else review another work of yours. Just shoot me a PM.
I really liked what you had so far! Keep up the good work I'll be following you
When he bares his teeth, winter meets its death And when he shakes his mane, we shall have spring again'
'Look there she goes that girl is so peculiar. I wonder if she's feeling well. With a dreamy far off look. And her nose stuck in a book' Something my best friend, Drew, said about me
The idea that a poem was a made thing stayed with me, and I decided then that I wanted to be an artist, not just a diarist. So I put myself through a kind of apprenticeship in writing poetry, and I understood even then that my practice as a poet was deeply related to my reading. — Edward Hirsch
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