Happiness

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Happiness

Once upon a time, was a man whose life was happy- He was not very rich or very successful, he lived by his own, without a woman beside him, or a family behind him. His house was small, and he suffered from pain and of cold. Deprivation and hunger was his share, the dreams of his childhood he had left behind and the future he abandoned, leaving it insecure. He had no friends, and his work, which was a simple, tough labor, was uninteresting and hopeless- But despite all this, he was happy, because as long as his life was destitute, his future unknown to him, and his plans and dreams forgotten - he had something to hope for.
The great mystery of life evaded him, leaving him in eternal awe in front of the world. In the rock bottom he reached, he was happy, because from there he could have only gone up.

And in the summer’s dusk, when the days began to shorten slowly and light was fading earlier and earlier every day in his glorious red demise. When the wind began to blow fiercely, reddening and yellowing leaves in its path and harbingering the frost in wailings. The man was sitting in his home and fed the fire in the hearth with another log, watching how first the flames lick the logs with its yellow tongue, then devours it greedily. The smoke rose from the chimney as a shivering, pale gray pillar, pointing its finger at the night sky. The man sat in his wicker chair and closed his hands to the fire to warm them a little, after a while, he fell asleep in his chair by the fire- which began to whisper in raging hunger and slowly die to ashes.
When he got up in the morning to go to work, he felt something out of the ordinary, his smile vanished, and despite the cold- that tightly governed the world around him- felt as if thousands and thousands of small fires were burning inside him and had trouble breathing.
In his work, that on that day was to transfer heavy sacks of grain into the new barn, he barely stood. The rich farmer- who employed him- saw his lousy work, but when he approached him to ask if he’s ill, the man quickly denied, scared of losing his employment. But the farmer saw his bad condition and sent the man home. By the end of the day, the doctor was already rushed to the house.

Winter arrived, carrying in his cloak ice that froze lakes and ponds on his path, bounding brooks with white chains of frost, sheds leaves off trees, and covers the ground in his white soft blanket, singing for it with breezes and thunders his calm lullabies, and under its loving hand the earth fell asleep, sleeping a slumber of death. The man, who was very sick, lay in his miserable bed, the doctor and several kind neighbors that came to offer their assistance beside him. However, the doctor- who was the smartest person in the village, a scholar hermit who left the many titles and honor who were his in the academy in the city so he could calmly live in the village- has already knew that his patient's death was near, and that there was nothing to do to stop it- the patient will not survive until the next morning- all remained for him to do was to ease the pain and to buy him as much time as he can.
He sent for the priest, who was his good friend and a kind and respected man.
The patient, feeling the waves of fever showering him, lay, moaning softly in his agony, burning with fever. When the priest came, the doctor greeted him with respect and friendship, and turned to leave, but the patient insisted that the person who cures the sick is a man of God as much as a priest, and demanded that he’ll stay. A few minutes later, the two came out looking grim, talking with each other quietly, and sent quickly for the carpenter, there was a need for a coffin. The patient’s final seconds were scorched in both their minds, how he declared he doesn’t need to confess, for he has no regrets, and then fell to his bed, never to get up again, on his face- a smile. He lived happy and he died happy, full of eternal awe in front of the world, and knowing that from there, he could only go up.
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Wow, that was so sad, yet so good!

I liked how the patient was so calm, even at death's door.

I still felt sorry for the poor guy, though, and I think that was probably one of your goals in writing this. LOL

The very last part of the last sentence brought a tear to my eye. "He could only go up."
It isn't schizophrenia when you write about the voices in your head and get it published. That's talent.
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I loved reading this, from the imagery, to the way you arranged the words. The way you wrote this really drew me in, and your choice of topic and the plot is really good too. my favorite part has to be the end, and when you were describing snow. I really love it!!! Keep writing!!!




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To start off, this piece is actually quite unique. I enjoyed the story-telling, your style is simple and yet descriptive for a few lines.
Because I have to do this, there were a FEW grammar errors, but no matter.
In the rock bottom he reached, he was happy, because from there he could have only gone up.
Now, this isn't really an error, but I would reconsider using the word "reach" because that is generally used to mean up.

Okay, I think this is an incorrect tense:
watching how first the flames lick the logs with its yellow tongue, then devours it greedily.
I know that you're saying he's watching the fire, but even if he is, it should be in past tense to make sense with the rest of your story.

has already knew that his patient's death was near, and that there was nothing to do to stop it- the patient will not survive until the next morning

same thing here, should be had and would not

Other than these grammar errors, FANTASTIC job! And now, you have to answer me on this. What really was the moral of this story? I'm not trying to be mean, rather it's just it made me think, and I want to see if the answer I'm thinking is what you were trying to say.

I loved the fact that it started off and ended in the same way. Great job, and keep posting!




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This is a nice story. :) I love your wording "he could only go up." Champion. <3
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