Freaks

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I was thinking about Christianity, and how the greatest commands are to love God, love yourself and love others. Jesus also said that we would be hated by the world because of following Him. So, I wrote this poem.And I am very sorry if you find it offensive.

Special,
Unique,
Odd,
Contrary,
Freaks,
Hated,
We are different.

They cannot understand-
We cannot understand always.
Yet our knowledge is simple:
Be us,
Stand out,
Be hated.

Our guide is unknown to them;
They call the emotion fake,
Temporary,
Nonexistent.
Our leader is hard;
They are afraid.

Our command,
Our mission,
They despise.
They hear hate-
We know love.

That is our crime:
Our love
Created us,
Ceated freaks.

Wonderful poem!
Real Christians are freaks of society, as they go against what is "normal."

In the words of tobymac's Jesus Freak song:

What will people do when they hear that I'm a Jesus Freak?
What will people say when they find out it's true?
I don't really care if they label me a Jesus Freak,
There ain't no disguising the truth!

You expressed this pretty well.

My only nitpick:

That is our crime:
Our love
Created us,
Created freaks.

That's all. Great work!

Hmm, well its a bit of a cliche, the use of words and how you used them. I like the idea behind them though.

That is our crime:
Our love
Created us,
Ceated freaks.

favorite line, very creative.

All Christians, please do not assault me, but I have to say that although I understand what you're trying to say, I still find the lines:
"Our guide is unkown to them;
They call the emotion fake,
Temporary,
Nonexistent.
Our leader is hard;
They are afraid.

Our command,
Our mission,
They despise.
They hear hate-
We know love."

a bit offensive, being Jewish (not a religious Jew, but non the less)
I know you have good intentions, and I appreciate your devotion, but I would like to suggest a little thought next time, because it still is a little uncomfortable, even though I know you meant only the best.
Aside from that it's a lovely poem, that in my opinion shows a lot of the pretty sides in Christianity.

This is what I'd like to call RAW poetry.

They cannot understand-
We cannot understand always.
Yet our knowledge is simple:
Be us,
Stand out,
Be hated.

*Our guide is unknown to them;
They call the emotion fake,
Temporary,
Nonexistent.
Our leader is hard;
They are afraid.

* This part is probably the most true and powerful part of the poem. As much as people don't want to admit, that's exactly what's going on, lol. So don't expect too much of a warm welcome to this poem from others on here.

It speaks truth and tells how life really is, despite political correctness and what human wish it could be/ pretend that it actually is. It's great. you did a very good job.

I'll do a more detail review later, but I have schoolwork and the treadmill to attend to for now.
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-Jojo

I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!

Freaks,
Hated,
We are different.

Our guide is unknown to them;
They call the emotion fake,
Temporary,
Nonexistent.
Our leader is hard;
They are afraid.

I LOVE this line, bu I don't under stand what "Our leader is hard" means?

They hear hate-
We know love.

And I had a tinny misunderstanding with this line "They hear hate". I love the context used here, but I think tey hear ignorance more so. But the poem is legend!

That is our crime:
Our love
Created us,
Ceated freaks.

I loved those lines the most.


Sigh, I love being a freak, though. haha
Excellent work