R.I.P. YWS

Linda Warrant walked down the long corridor to the golden doors. In her left hand she held her laptop, in her right, her purse. She pushed the big marble down arrow and the golden doors parted like the red sea. She stepped in and pushed floor number one. After a long day of being a principal it was nice to relax. She opened her laptop and logged on to Facebook. Everyone was talking about this new website, YWS. She looked it up and it was just a dumb writing website. Then the elevator stopped with a ding at floor five. In walked R-Truth.
"You're R-Truth!" She exclaimed.
"Yep." he nodded.
"Do you want to help me attack a writing website?"
He thought for a moment. "What's in it for me?" he asked.
Her turn to think. "Lil Jimmy's on YWS." She lied. He probably was, but, she didn't know for sure.
He pulled out a giant knife. "Let's do this." He smiled.
He stabbed the computer and she punched it. The punched, slapped, kicked, and even bit the computer.
"My work here is done." He said, smiling.
They broke the glass and thrust the computer through. They got off the elevator and were surrounded by cops.
"You are under arrest for murder." One said putting handcuffs on Linda while another put a pair on R-Truth.
"Not again!" R-Truth moaned.
They spent the rest of their lives rotting in prison. Young Writers Society was missed by all.
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Well, this is good for a bit of fun. You need to go over your grammar and fix a few typos though. Hope this is helpful!

- pigeon

Well it was written well, I couldn't find anything to nit pick, but what confused me was the meeting of a celebrity. I think you should explain who he was and what he was. And who is Lil Jimmy? Also, I don't get why a principal would act that way? Why would she want to destroy a computer and why would she enlist some person she just met? I can't picture this R-Truth person wanting to help some crazy woman (because that's how I'd see someone who wanted me to help them destroy a computer) destroy a laptop because an enemy (?) was on it. And the end where they got arrested? I don't get it, it was a website, it wasn't a person and it wasn't really destroyed, just the laptop really.

All of that aside, I thought the story was put together well, again I found no errors and it was cute to be honest. Especially when R-Truth went "not again"

Nice job

Grandison