Bone Queen

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I love this...but, its not a complete poem in my opinion.
I want to get more from this, all I get is some haunting skeleton lady is coming to get me.*scared face*
If I read this as part of a complete story or novel even, it would fit in perfectly, add more, I want more.
Your writing is refreshing, easily flows, and leaves an eery feeling which is amazing, but, it needs more.
This is like an incomplete thought, a beautiful, eery, and well written thought, but to me it's not finished.

I realize I'm rambling, and this is only my opinion, so many apologies.
But all in all, perfection...I just desire there to be more. Even left as it is, it's a very good poem, and intrigues me to read more of your works. *like* :)
"You can't find another me, but I can find a million yous."

"My shadow followed when you walked away and ever since that day my life has never been the same"




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Sorry, but it seems a bit weird, don't you think? Nothing is really explained WHY she is a "Bone" Queen. It sounds like she is a ghost than a "Bone" Queen.

GREAT JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!!!!



~Kat
“There’s no point in being grown up if you can’t act a little childish sometimes.”-The Fourth Doctor
"Who I was, what I did, that's not who I am." - Castiel
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Thi is absolutely great. Haunting, chilling, earth shattering. Words really cannot describe how much I love this. Great job!
However, I am sad that it ended. I loved the simplicity of it, but sad that it ended all the same.
"Music in the soul can be heard by the universe" -Lao-Tzu



How odd I can have all this inside me and to you it’s just words.
— David Foster Wallace