Water

It was cold and dripping. Very wet actually.

"When are we going to get the new water heater?" I called out, shivering. It would figure that our house was not only cold, but the water heater was busted up, making showers a daily adventure.

"Shirley! Stop your whining. Your dad does so much for you alread--"

I ignored the rest of her lecture.

I dipped my toe into the water and shivered. Have you ever put your fingers in ice cold water and have your arm seize up? Well, that's basically what happened now. "There is no way..." I murmured.

"And for all the good our family does for you..."

Would she ever stop talking?

"And to be ungrateful like this..."

I closed my eyes tightly, putting my foot in the bath water. It was cold. But I figured that with all the shivering and chattering of my teeth, my mom's voice would go away. Then I slipped the rest of my body in. I could feel my breath get short and raspy.

"And to think that I would have all this lip from you..."

I put my ears underwater. An instant headache, I assure you. But it was a better headache then what waited outside for me...

It was very short... but the beginning bit gave me ideas before I actually knew what you were talking about! Has this happened to you or something? O_o It is pretty good though... <_<

Hello again, O Guardian of All Oinking Beings. I think this avatar is the best I've seen you with.
I think I can get the ocassional glimpse of genius in this but I don't think it's the best you've ever written.

Haha. I love taking showers, and my parents always complain that their showers are icy because of mine. Sometimes they shut off the water and stuff which makes it REALLY bad, but... whatever. You still gotta love them.

TBR made the avvie, by the way.

Hi Snoink!!
I'm new on this website and haven't yet gotten to read/edit any of you're works! I've heard they're awesome! So, here we go!

the water heater was busted up.

(I don't think you need the "up" here.)

I ignored the rest of her lecture.

(Who's "her"?)

Then I slipped the rest of my body in.

(I don't think you need the "then" here.)

I put my ears underwater.

(It might sound better if you put "I put my head underwater." Instead of "I put my ears underwater.")

This is good! I don't really know anything about the character though. Did you want it that way? Personally, I like to know what the character's basic looks are, like: hair, eye color, skin color. That kind of stuff.
So, this writing is AWESOME!! You should have all you're stuff published if everything is as good (or better! ) than this!!

Alzora