Pebbles, Hero of the Tortoises

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Just a fun poem about my friend's Tortoise :D


No one knows what Pebbles does,
Some say he's a Tortoise hero.
But I'm just glad he's mine!


One story that I have been told,
Tells of Pebbles, brave and bold.
Stands behind the garden shed,
Slowly, slowly, raises his head.
A hero's mask upon his face,
He flies with beauty, and with grace.
He swerves and dips in the sky,
With sharp ears, he hears a cry.
'Oh help me, help me Pebbles!'
A little Rabbit, taunted by rebels.
Pebbles see's and dips straight in,
Bif! Bash! Pow! The end of the din.
'Thank you! Thank you!'
Cries little Rabbit, who,
Incedentally was called Marvin,
Silly, stupid, shaken Marvin.
Pebbles has done his work for the day,
And so returns to his box and warm hay.
A good days work, a fair fight,
And so our hero says 'Goodnight!'

An exciting story is this account,
My own Pebbles, a hero though?
No, but I'm just glad he's mine! :D


-Don't judge too harshly, it was just a laugh writing it! :D
Last edited by wolfgirl13 on Thu Mar 24, 2011 7:13 am, edited 1 time in total.




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Haha, this poem is awesome! Not sure why a tortoise would help a rabbit, but whatever! Anyway, I want to know who exactly is taunting the rabbit. You said rebels, but I think it may be cuter to actually say what the rebel is. It might be funny if the rebel was an insignificant insect, like a cricket or something!

Anyway, it's very cute. :D
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One story that I have been told,
Tells of Pebbles, brave and bold.
Stands behind the garden shed,
Slowly, slowly, raises his head.
A hero's mask upon his face,
He flies with beauty, and with grace.
He swerves and dips in the sky,
With sharp ears, he hears a cry.
'Oh help me, help me Pebbles!'
A little Rabbit, taunted by rebels.
Pebbles sees and dips straight in,
Bif! Bash! Pow! The end of the din.
'Thank you! Thank you!'
Cries little Rabbit, who,
Incidentally was called Marvin,
Silly, stupid, shaken Marvin.
Pebbles has done his work for the day,
And so returns to his box and warm hay. (A tortoise living in a box filled with hay? Hmm, kind of cute, now that I think about it.)
A good day's work, a fair fight,
And so our hero says 'Goodnight!'


It's a cute poem. I'm making a guess that the 'rebels' are cats?
Keep writing! :)
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I have no idea who the rebels are. :D I guess it's just nonsense. ;)
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I like it! Why aren't there more stories about superhero tortoises?
I did notice flies was misspelled (misspelled: also a word that is misspelled almost daily) and Marvin is either missing an i the first time you spell his name or Marvn has an i added the second. But that's all, because it was adorable, and I'm a sucker for adorable!
Keep writing and tehe it up, buddy!
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:D Tehe Tehe Tehe!
Glad you liked it.
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Hi there. Lavvi in to review.

This is a cute poem. It reminds me of those stories we would make up when we were little children. The poem is most definitely supernatural, with all this stuff going on. But it's warm and kind. But who are the rebels? Or is it just something that needed to go in there?

It's like a story for fun, like a hero's tale. You know, we read about Hercules and stuff, but here, really, we should be reading about Pebbles :P

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Tehe thanks :D

No I have no idea who the rebels are, everyone is asking- I really should come up with an answer. :)

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Generally speaking, a howling wilderness does not howl: it is the imagination of the traveler that does the howling.
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