Back in Time Scenes

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Those who have read the boatman will know it starts out as a first person story, of someone who gets killed. I was wondering if I could have several scenes in the book where the same character, in the first person is writing about the build up to his death, or would it be confusing?
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Oh you mean flash backs? If you write the flashbacks well enough then I don't think anyone would be confused you just need to make sure that your readers are aware that it is a flash back.
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Yeah, it really does depend on how you want to structure the story. Is it a start at the end and go back to the beginning? If you make it clear that that's what you're doing there shouldn't be a problem.
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No, more like a person describing the events leading up to his death, in the first person viewpoint.

You could do it, but it would be very confusing. In fact, it might be easier to describe it from present tense instead of describing it in the past tense. Even the third person limited would be better.

So, I'd consider changing the viewpoint.
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Watch the movie "Sunset Boulevard." They deal with the kind of scene you're talking about in a tasteful, intriguing manner. Also, be sure to take a peek at "Citizen Kane" which starts off with a death and then suddenly goes back to see why that character died. Remember, movies are your friends!
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