Profanity

I wrote this literally on the spot. I got the idea from reading another poem which I will try to find a link to. I have used some very stereotypical Australian slang. A barbie is a barbecue, a stubby is a beer and a yobo is a crude sloppy person ( I can't really explain it). Currently profanity is my favorite word. What's yours?

topic76473.html ( link to other poem but it's really nothing like mine)

Well, there's not much I have to critique you on with this poem, because it's very origional and there's nothing I would change. I like it.

This sort of thing reminds me of Bill Cosby stand up comedy, where he will censor profanity with words like "filth" and "foul".

As for a favorite word, I'm not sure I want to think about that. A friend of mine started using the word "joshing" today, and she said it about five times in the same hour. Utterly brutal, especially since she's the sort of person you can't picture saying that word, you know? xD

Well, I really like the poem and keep up the good work!
-Alex

Hey Jennya!

I like this. A lot. I dunno, it's just really amusing and kinda funny. I don't think there's anything technically wrong with it. I don't mind that the meter or whatever isn't perfect; poetry isn't about perfection. xD

*clicks like*

Keep on writing!

Hello there Jennya !! I am here for the review. But it will not be anything like a review because i do not think anything should be changed in this because it is meant to be this way. But the constant repetitions annoyed me a lot but as i said they are meant to be that way. This poem could be a bit more large you could start thinking of elaborating it and editing it. And yes i want to say one thing here that please take punctuations under consideration while writing a poem. And, you need not CAPITALIZE every first word of a sentence. I liked the poem.
Keep writing.

I enjoyed the actual content and the language used in this poem, but my only problem was capitalisation. Yep. It may sound like I'm nit picking, but unless the capitalisation is there to mark the beginning of a new sentence, I find it near enough impossible to read it as I keep stopping like it's a new sentence. Of course, if that was what you intended, then that's fine, but otherwise, make sure to bare that in mind.
This poem came across as quite light hearted to me, due to the use of Australian slang and the tone conveyed. I liked it as a result. It isn't your typical run of the mill emotive poem and that's what made it stand out to me. Keep up the good work. :-}

I thought this was pretty funny. It was short, straight to the point, but had a very good message. Nice job.

Hey Jennya! Thanks for commenting on my poem.

And thanks for explaining some of the Australian lingo! I wouldn't have known it otherwise, being in America and all. For us, Barbies are dolls.

Anyway, your poem was rather repetitious, but I think you knew this! One thing I would have liked to see here is you adapting the word "profanity" to looked more like an adjective and verb, when you used it that way. That way, it would spice things up a little bit and the poem would make a bit more sense.

Thanks again!

This is awesome. Made my day =] Thank you

That was a profanity awesome poem! :p

Thanks for giving background on the Australian lingo, it cleared some weird profanity up.

I personally saw the poem as a parody of just how much profanity profanity people use in conversations. Which made it humorous for me but maybe it was more about censorship or catharsis for you.

I like this. It's amusing and clear cut. Good job!