The Idol

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The Idol

Roy auditions for American Idol on January 22nd. The producers like him. He’s worth money. He’s glad he decided to do it. If it wasn’t for his friends, he wouldn’t have done it. Later, the judges admire him. He’s an artist. People vote. Girls go crazy about him. He’s got fans now. He receives letters, e-mails, and phone calls. He’s voted through to the final two. He’s made friends and watched them leave the competition. He hopes, he’s nervous. The final moment comes. He loses.
But he’s still an Idol – fans won’t let him down. He signs a contract; he releases an album. His music is inspiring. He gives hope.
Far away from Hollywood – the place that has become Roy’s home – in New York, Kylie silently cries. Ever since, she found out about Roy, about his music, his being, things were better inside her. She didn’t cry as much, because when it felt like she was breaking down, she’d listen to Roy’s voice and he’d calm her down. Now, she sits perched next to the window, the wind coldly blowing her blonde blocks against her wet cheeks. A sad but hopeful song plays, each note hitting her eardrums with the grace of falling snowflake. Kylie listens to Roy’s every word, believing it. He gives her strength and helps her to move on through every terribly hard moment. Since both her parents died in a plane crash – in the plane that was bringing them back to her – Roy’s music was the only keeping her from suicide. Roy was her Idol.
Even further away, in Northern Europe – Finland – Aria’s pen hovers above a plain white piece of paper, preparing to write the first words of the sequel to her bestselling debut novel. Words keep flowing into her head; it’s not that she doesn’t know how to put them together into a dazzling beginning, but that there are too many ways in which she’d make her words shine. Aria never knew she could write, let alone write a bestseller. It all began on a night when she was listening to a song. It was a song she loved with all her being, as if there was some sort of energy imprinted in it that attracted her to each beat. It was a song of Roy’s – Aria’s new-found Idol. Right then, she took a paper and scribbled down all what came into her mind. Then, in less than six months, she finished what proved to be a masterpiece. The main character, Tommy, was in so many ways similar to Roy. She wanted him to be like that, and maybe that was what gave life to her novel, what inspired it.
In Seoul – South Korea – Soya lies unconscious on a hospital bed, fighting still for survival. It’s only the modern apparatus that keeps her heart beating and the doctors have little hope. Her parents are desperate and devastated. Soya has been hit by a bus, while she was crossing the street on her way back from school. The bus was going way too fast to be able to stop; the driver tried to honk and make her get out of the way, but she didn’t hear the noise – she was listening to a song on her iPod. Now, sitting beside her bed, knowing her each breath was another battle, her mom gets an idea. How could she forget? Soya’s room was practically loaded with posters of that singer that became her Idol. She’d told her so many about him, though she didn’t care much at the time. Her mother quickly searches for the iPod that somehow slipped undamaged through the accident. After she gets the doctors’ approval, she dabs the earphones in Soya’s ears and one of Roy’s most beautiful songs starts playing. Vaguely, through the darkness, Soya hears a few notes and her subconscious recognizes the pattern of sounds. She fights harder, with passion. Five hours later, she opened her eyes for a short moment.
Across the ocean, in Sydney – Australia – Emily and Ian lie embraced in front of the fireplace, watching little vigorous sparks escape the flames. They feel so happy, so fulfilled and in love. They are so sure they are meant to be together. They got married last year and their passion for each other didn’t dissipate ever since. They’ll never forget that night, that concert that brought them together. It was Roy Gosling performing and neither would have missed the change to see him live in concert. He was their Idol. Now, it seemed like it was a chance for something more that seeing an Idol – a chance for love.
What if, Roy never auditioned for the show that gave him the adoration of so many people around the world? What if he was stubborn enough to say no? What if he was afraid to show the world whom he was? By making a dream unknown to him come true, Roy didn’t open only one door – his. He shoved open so many, and lit the way of those who had lost hope and will. If he would have stayed aside, he would have gone against his destiny.
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Hi Glitter!

So, this was an interesting story that has a nice concept to it, and it was very heartwarming to read about, even if it is a fiction. However, I think you could do so much more with it. Right now, it feels like at outline.

You give us information regarding all of these stories and all of these people but you don't really go into detail about them or give us a chance to get emotionally invested in any of them. Roy himself isn't given enough coverage for us to understand why he's effecting and inspiring people so deeply, and thus the story doesn't have the impact that it should. Instead of briefly flashing over all of these characters, I would pick one to focus on and build the development of all of the other characters around them. Here, it seems that the logical choice would be Roy since he is the one causing the inspiration and joy.

You start off with an interesting plot thread -- that he only auditioned because his friends convinced him too. I would develop this idea more and maybe try to write up some dialogue scenes as this proves to be important later on and maybe Roy can draw back to it when he gets as far as he does in the show. Maybe he doesn't want to get in at first, and his attitude will change. I would develop some of the other singers that get close to the finals and Roy has to watch be eliminated. Does he have a good or a poor relationship with the eventual winner? Answer those questions and you can strengthen your plot as well.

This is Roy's story, right? These people that you introduce in the succeeding paragraphs are to prove a point; that winning isn't necessarily the most important thing in the world. As I said in the last paragraph, focus on Roy. Build his character. Once he looses, how does feel? Is he sad, frustrated? Maybe he doesn't realize his worth. Maybe others around him will try to comfort him, but it won't work. Now, I don't know if they still do this, but a few years back I saw everyone in the top 10 perform at a concert tour. Maybe the concert tour can change his mind -- his friends that he made will remind him that he'll still get music deals and the effect that he's had on other people, but he might think they're over exaggerating at first. Considering they tour, this would give him the opportunity to meet a lot of different fans. They'd tell them their stories, and and he realizes his worth, and considers the rhetorical questions at the end of this.

All of this development will help answer a very important question that will make this piece click; why he is affecting all of these people with his music? We'll see -- is he young? Smart? Funny? Cute? Does he have the voice of an angel? Does he have an inspiring childhood story? Even though you might not answer this question completely, we'll still get a better sense of it.

Hope this helps -- I'm sorry if I seemed to harsh, because I really did like this and I can't wait to see where you take it. PM me if/when you post an edit, or if you have any questions regarding this review. Good luck with your revisions!

~ Elinor




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Hey glitterbox,
This is a really different piece from your last one, and it was really interesting. I loved the way you wrote this because it gave you more of an overview of a story than just telling a story. It gave us lots of things to think about as well, and it made me think about the shows on the TV and how so many people love those contestants as well.
I also liked this story because it wasn't all about the main character you talk about. It showed what the main character did to other people, how they helped other people. Not many books do that because they are focused on what the main character does all the time, which is never a bad thing, but this had a different dimesion to it and I think it was very different, yet very effective as a short story.
Keep writing
-lovestowrite :D
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