I really loved this poem, especially since I feel the same way, today in this world, people are so hyprocritical, but really, it was an awesome poem. This will definetly be one I read again!
Wow, I really like this. I could actually feel the emotions the narrator of the poem (you?) must have been feeling. It was amazing, keep it up! ShadowPrincess16
“wanting what you could not have led to misery and madness” ― Cassandra Clare, Clockwork Prince
You know what I say, "short reviews are the best," so I'm going to make this some-what short. You have an amazing idea here, and you crafted it into a lovely piece of literature. Your spelling and grammar are spot-on, and your imagery really makes me see what's happening. The words came smoothly and effectively, and I didn't trip over them. This was a great poem.
Tyler.
"Is this the real life, or is this just fantasy? Caught in a landslide, no escape from reality."
Hi there! Since you've gotten so many reviews already, I'll just give a general impression and tell you I loved it. It was cute, and sad, and wonderful, and cliche without being cliche. What I mean is yeah it was something we have probably all heard before, but you presented it in a way we don't mind reading it again.
The rhyming was great, and it didn't seem like you stretched it at all, really my only complaint is the last stanza. Alone, I love it, and I can relate to it so much. I'm betting it is probably the one that means the most to you as well. My problem with it is that it just seems awkward compared to the others. I think the stanza preceding it is a little more of an ending stanza, and I don't know, it is like it ends then begins again. So yeah, hope I helped and didn't make you mad. I loved it!
