I've been enjoying your book so far. It's pretty good. I'll definately continue reading. The one thing I've really noticed is that you've switched a few times between past and present tense. In some places it's not that bad, but in others it jumps out and bugs me. Don't stop writing this, I want to know what happens. Hurry and get the next part out. Your cliff hanger works all too well.
It does??? O-o I didn't notice. But then again I wrote it so....yeah. ^^' But tank u fur yur dedication, lack of comments make me feel lonely. And yeah I've been trying so hard in my stories to write awesome cliffhangers, I just love them so much. Rite on.
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